Abrupt Finales Leave Unfinished

By CharlottesWeb





Remember summer, setting on the sidewalk?
Sun too bright, concrete so hot it burned our skin.
Time moved slow then, and we talked
Staring ahead, watching the motions
Of the world, the other side of the street
As it waved and, danced in the heat
We were only children

We never said goodbye
Not officially anyway
There was one last day
Unrecognized and simple
Where we didn’t realize
The ending was next
And we moved through
the motions of routine
unaware, unprepared.
How do you ready
for a surprise finale?
One, two, three… you're on!
Three, two, one…you're gone?

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© 2007 CharlottesWeb
Published on Wednesday, January 17, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Cherry Bear On Thursday, January 22, 2009, Cherry Bear (25)By person wrote:

    Another great poem Charlotte, your way of writing in courage's me to write more as well. I love your words. You are one of the most soft spoken and kindness people I know. Your awesome.

  • A former member wrote: It's so sad but so true how often this happens, in childhood and in adultdom. We should depart friends with embraces and kind words every time we leave, just in case it's the last... for whatever reason that may be.

  • Moonflower On Monday, May 21, 2007, Moonflower (298)By person wrote:

    i really love how you said this. childhood love? or friend? either way its beautiful. just loved it.

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Monday, January 29, 2007, TropicalSnowstorm (1580)By person wrote:

    You captured a lot in this piece, very well done. Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • A former member wrote: Oh How I can relate. If I could only turn time back to my childhood and innocence. I would ask for time to be stopped. we were all so pure. So ready to take on this big world. ][ ][ Scholar

  • carlosjackal On Thursday, January 18, 2007, carlosjackal (2787)By person wrote:

    Fantastic write. This reminded me of those friends I held dear as a child only to lose them to circumstances beyond control..not tragic circumstances but your typical 'moved to another town/part of the country'-circumstances. Thank You - This was truly wo

  • carlosjackal On Thursday, January 18, 2007, carlosjackal (2787)By person wrote:

    nderful in its evocation. *faves*

  • A former member wrote: at the end: *did you mean "your" as in the possessive or "you're" as in you are?* You know I never nitpick, but it could change the whole meaning of the work and I'd like to know I'm reading it right... :)

  • CharlottesWeb On Thursday, January 18, 2007, CharlottesWeb (509)By person wrote:

    :)...you know, I had to think abou that. I mean really think about it. lol.

  • Mylissa On Thursday, January 18, 2007, Mylissa (825)By person wrote:

    I can feel this poem...been there. tragic, though beautiful.

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