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lost in lucidity -
By Six-Out
I'm lackluster in eloquence
and all out of anything that could be defined as
elegant. trust me. this time.
and I'll deconstruct a line of delusion.
a memory.
bleeding meanings from my eyes.
and calling them tears.
with a few left over letters running down my cheeks
begging the stars to scream back.
because these nights. these dreams
they're way too fucking empty.
as the moon is throwing stones at me.
I'm a waste. in a wasteful world.
therefore I'm nothing important.
but I'd rather live.
with closed eyes and fingers hitting keys
as if they'll paint a masterpiece when I'm not looking.
ashamed. that I've forgotten the touch of a pen.
hair in my face- to hide the denial.
and I'm a waste.
but I don't want to die.
-a dagger of metaphor to my chest.
plunge deep. and let these words kill me.
because I'd rather live in these letters.
than lie to myself.
lost in lucidity. I paint my dreams.
and I'd rather live.
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© 2006 Six-Out
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On Friday, September 14, 2018, Dilated View
(582)
wrote:
Miss you and your pen man. Loved the conflicting concepts in here. When the world is a bitter place we find our escape, create a better reality. It doesn't make the world change, but maybe it shifts our perspective just enough to put up with it for a while. Come back and write sometime.
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A former member wrote:
simply amazing :)
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On Thursday, October 26, 2006, Aunty Depressant
(423) wrote:
Just enjoyed much.
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On Thursday, October 26, 2006, Aunty Depressant
(423) wrote:
Just thought I'd take some time and look at more of your writing. I was cringing at computer, too impersonal, and had to pick up paper again to get started writing..this made me think of that feeling I had. Was sweet to kick back, instead of be at desk. J
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On Tuesday, May 9, 2006, PoeticHellion
(191) wrote:
Why are you just the best? Mmm. "I'm lackluster in eloquence and all out of anything that could be defined as elegant. trust me. this time." Love the beginning. And it's not true.
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On Friday, February 10, 2006, elisa
(1595) wrote:
'...begging the stars to scream back...'........is that too much to ask for...?....*sighs...surrounded by asterisks*
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On Wednesday, February 8, 2006, urbanhumility
(1158) wrote:
your words are always intelligent and demanding attention......my eyes flow on your words................well done...............urban
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On Wednesday, February 1, 2006, Railway_Butterfly
(353) wrote:
This is nice. Really nice.. thank you for sharing it :)
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On Wednesday, February 1, 2006, Railway_Butterfly
(353) wrote:
and was to be considered in this way.. and I particularly enjoyed the opening verse. 'I'm lackluster in eloquence' it's almost like you're being ironic.. the words, to say, or read or hear sound wonderful.. then you consider what they mean..
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On Wednesday, February 1, 2006, Railway_Butterfly
(353) wrote:
for some reason.. the full stops in this really stood out. I tend to over use commas, maybe that's why.. but it was really effective. Like every bit of what you said was a statment in it's own right..
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On Tuesday, January 31, 2006, nightshade
(118) wrote:
damn it six you made me cry and this is one gay guy that doesn't usually cry i guess this is why we all think of you as a god on dp man but the pain in this piece screams hurt but the hope strives to break through
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A former member wrote:
.."with closed eyes and fingers hitting keys/as if they'll paint a masterpiece when I'm not looking./ashamed. that I've forgotten the touch of a pen.".. this twisted my heart in every way imaginable.. like biting a fist to suppress a scream..
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A former member wrote:
..this hurt me, for you.. so fucking much. *hugs tight* ..you amaze me, sometimes.
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A former member wrote:
this broke my heart, jon. you are much more than a waste. *hugs* you are beautiful.
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