[bane]

By Six-Out

and I drank the poison like water-
said Romeo to his .brokenhearted. Juliette
as she wept.

and we're built on lies.

she said- as he lay at her feet
and she walked away.

-
[pleasant] sighted. said I to the night
as the stars faded away- and I cursed society
for stealing them from the sky
and throwing them on a silver screen
this isn't how it was meant to be.

and her voice- it was thunderous
they told me. after the fact. and after the dreams
when nothing. means a thing
but we always try. try. try- to break it down
and piece it back together for the sick pleasure of knowing
that.we.can


and we're nowhere-nearer the stars now.
we've just stolen the magic from them-

.to put them on our level.

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Copyright 2005 Jon Rodgers
Published on Wednesday, May 4, 2005.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: Indeed it was a colossal read

  • TheBardOfBlasphemy On Saturday, July 9, 2005, TheBardOfBlasphemy (358)By person wrote:

    Awesome write. Captures the jaded feeling that we have reduced every feeling, vision (etc) to fake-hollywood-sold out crap.

  • Dei On Monday, June 6, 2005, Dei (665)By person wrote:

    OH my god jon. This was terrific. Different from your others.

  • A former member wrote: "as the stars faded away- and I cursed society for stealing them from the sky and throwing them on a silver screen this isn't how it was meant to be." ---- amazing. you're words are spoken so beautifully. ....-samone

  • A former member wrote: I've so missed reading your poetry, love. The way your works always convey breath-taking emotion, however bleak it may be. . glimmering with imagery and a touch of .. influential magic, in some way.

  • shadowsinthelight On Thursday, May 5, 2005, shadowsinthelight (146)By person wrote:

    and we're nowhere-nearer the stars now. we've just stolen the magic from them- How cool, but there is still magic, somewhere. S.

  • AniDayz On Wednesday, May 4, 2005, AniDayz (820)By person wrote:

    you rock my dirty socks clean.

  • Kinkypoptart On Wednesday, May 4, 2005, Kinkypoptart (555)By person wrote:

    great write. ~*~TarT~*~

  • A former member wrote: Jon... that was pretty great. Yup. ;) And where is my phone call eh?

  • Liz On Wednesday, May 4, 2005, Liz (267)By person wrote:

    I like how short it is. Not that less is more with you, but I like that it's just a clip, just a segment of something bigger we don't quite get to see fully. Just an idea, an observation, to mull over...

  • Liz On Wednesday, May 4, 2005, Liz (267)By person wrote:

    And the tiny details don't so much matter anyway, and that's clear. You only have to know a little to know it all, and you only have to describe a little for us

  • serotonin lost On Wednesday, May 4, 2005, serotonin lost (145)By person wrote:

    this is absolutly brilliant, i can't believe someone can say this without tears in there eyes!

  • elisa On Wednesday, May 4, 2005, elisa (1616)By person wrote:

    ugly with envy they spit at the stars and close the world at night [even the bars] because only vampires can penetrate darkness......as gravity threads the puppet string through the third eye - blinding the stargazer with [lesser dream] lies...

  • elisa On Wednesday, May 4, 2005, elisa (1616)By person wrote:

    ...no matter how you arrange the words -i- know the meaning is blindingly beautiful~love elisa

  • Northstar On Wednesday, May 4, 2005, Northstar (375)By person wrote:

    this leaves me with a neauseated emptiness--the way you phrase everything in this piece is just perfect to express the sickening destruction of anything other than mediocrity

  • Six-Out On Wednesday, May 4, 2005, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Inspired by late night chats, and posted out of curiosity. Enjoy.


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