abstract ideations of comfort and co-dependancy

By Jonas

i'm drunk on cheap wine
and i'm thinking
of you

and 'you' describes
some sort of comfortable feminine abstract
on who's breasts i can rest my head
and hear a gentle heartbeat
underneath the
skin
and
bone

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Copyright 2004 Jonas
Published on Thursday, December 30, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: i know this feeling but..in a different light obviously hehe... nice to see works from you hope there is more to come

  • A former member wrote: i thought this was very beautiful

  • purr_verse On Friday, December 31, 2004, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    ahh, quiet fantasies...so much less complicated than the full 3D experience... This is marvellously expressed; clear without overstatement, and...well, just right. I realise the banality of that last statement, and I'm sorry for my lack of clearer express

  • purr_verse On Friday, December 31, 2004, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    expression; you deserve a better comment for this excellent write. Outstanding.

  • slow.burn.star On Thursday, December 30, 2004, slow.burn.star (84)By person wrote:

    such dreams we keep. alone. and knowing the tide, will forever ebb.. you never flow.

  • BeautifulCalamity On Thursday, December 30, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (428)By person wrote:

    i agree with six, seems like there is more to say. but it is lovely. . and perhaps the length was intentional. . but it was a lot of greatness in such few words. . ;)

  • Six-Out On Thursday, December 30, 2004, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    Sounds unfinished. Sometimes short is better, but this left me wanting more...unless that's what you were going for.

  • AniDayz On Thursday, December 30, 2004, AniDayz (812)By person wrote:

    sweetness

  • Jonas On Thursday, December 30, 2004, Jonas (715)By person wrote:

    i so hate you.

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