Revolution.
By sole
A rebel breath from a lung,
Complimented with the tongue.
Affecting change,
Provoking thought,
A lyrical reign,
Where wrongs are fought.
A yell from the loin
Or a cry from the eye,
Noticed you will be.
Encouraging or maddening
Depending on what it is they see.
Rally around the sound
Of strong opinions
Where strength is found.
Feeding your freedom
To feel what is right,
By preaching these feelings
And abstaining
To stay quiet.
Gather around the crowd
Of a million voices in unison.
A million voices loud and proud
United in their resolve to cause
A change that warrants the call of all.
Show yourselves for who are
And yell your message from afar.
Remain steadfast
In your mission for a change
But stay mindful
Not to proclaim a doused flame.
Should tragedy befall you
And strike your tongue,
Pierce through your throat
And rip through your lungs,
Do not panic and quietly flee
But stand tall and embody dignity.
You can not speak but you have a voice.
Manifesting one resides in choice.
Awards
Comments on "Revolution."
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On Monday, July 23, 2012, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
Beautifully tragic. hello there you , congrat on POD..
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On Thursday, May 29, 2008, BeautyInShadow
(8) wrote:
Very empowering write.
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On Thursday, January 8, 2004, Methos
(121) wrote:
Even without a set rythym, this poem flows well..defining emotions and thoughts, a powerful piece, that needn't be changed in my eyes.. -Methos
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On Monday, January 5, 2004, Mr King
(547) wrote:
this to me is a great piece... keep standing in the face of criticism... victory requires committment... committment even when the whole world seems against you... and at times it will be...
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On Monday, December 22, 2003, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
this is preaty good.. I like that I am not the only prophet here..
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On Monday, December 22, 2003, MercyRain
(105) wrote:
yes, i can agree with a lot of the comments here about this being a strangely uplifting piece for DP, without getting into the preachy side or buttery side of things, but
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On Monday, December 22, 2003, MercyRain
(105) wrote:
as heavily as this poem utililzes rhyme, the lack of a set pattern or rhythm seems to be a detriment to what could be a much more forceful poem
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On Monday, December 22, 2003, MercyRain
(105) wrote:
of course, a focus on revolution could necessitate some playing around with atonal rhythm or whatnot, but in this case, i don't think as appropriate... you are trying to inspire via an anthem
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On Monday, December 22, 2003, MercyRain
(105) wrote:
which are most effective with an order of rhythm & rhyme, and even slogans to rally around
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On Monday, December 22, 2003, sole
(93) wrote:
I appreciate the criticism Mercy. When I wrote this poem it just streamed out and I didn't really try and butter it up like I do other works. It reflects back on what motivated me to write so I feel I should keep it intact to honor the inspiration. No
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On Monday, December 22, 2003, sole
(93) wrote:
Nonethless your words hold weight and I'll definitely take them in consideration with future writes. Thanks again.
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On Wednesday, December 10, 2003, Delphoid-Q
(213) wrote:
The beginning and end of this poem are beyond fantastic. This work as a whole deserves to be published. I love it. Super well done.
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On Monday, November 24, 2003, cre
(410) wrote:
Again a fantastic write . . I found in this a sense of quiet power and the kind of strength that inspires me.
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On Monday, November 24, 2003, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
I'll second that! :) purr
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On Monday, November 24, 2003, maddin foxxxy
(358) wrote:
"You can not speak but you have a voice"....you said it all yourself...the thoughts of spoken rebellions....all that's left for me to say is AMEN.
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On Monday, November 24, 2003, Spiritus_Frumenti
(340) wrote:
hmm..its not too often we get uplifting pieces...usually i am not a fan of those but this is an exception...didn't seem too preachy...very good....-l-
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On Monday, November 24, 2003, WinterGrave
(258) wrote:
vary insperational in a vary dark sort of way, nicly done.~~~Grave
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On Monday, November 24, 2003, Drifter
(265) wrote:
damn, i like this. good write