hurry January
By cre
I lay in dreams
Covered by the drifting
Of dry October leaves
I sing to the stars on brittle nights
Or is it that I cry
Far, so far beyond
Yet still I hear you sigh
The anthem of every backwoods evening
Playing violin to your encore tears
While this city burning bright
Plays spotlight to my dance of fear
hurry January
Lay to stone this sea
This weakness that I weep
hurry January
I am still awake
And I'd die to fall to sleep
I lay within your words
And faded morning mist
I still burn, beyond your purchased kiss
Your painted scape
Drips into my view
The highway miles flash by, yet
I am still so close to you
I would play this tragedy
From a balcony of your hate
Yet beyond the curtain falling
You still dance at center stage
hurry January
Freeze this pain
As you do the falling rain
hurry January
I can't go on much longer
I cannot breathe awake
- - -
hurry January
In slumber leave me free
Settle me in bitter peace
I still breathe
hurry January
for I would die to sleep.
Comments on "hurry January"
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A former member wrote:
The truth you hide in between your lines are words no other could ever begin to describe......If only it was really that easy to numb the pain. ][ ][
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A former member wrote:
Well Done : ]
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On Tuesday, July 5, 2005, SorrowSoul
(54) wrote:
Very good write.
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On Wednesday, July 7, 2004, Railway_Butterfly
(353) wrote:
oh...this is just amazing..god,there are so many lines I could quote from this...truly beautiful,magnificent work..xxx...
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A former member wrote:
There's nothing I can say that others haven't already said before me but this is truly a wonderful poem. I think that out of everything I've read here at Dark Poetry this is my favourite and it is definately worth commenting on.
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On Tuesday, November 18, 2003, urbanhumility
(1158) wrote:
you captured all that is sad. you have en-capsulated a rare feeling, at least in the way you portray "it", your words are framed to your style,like silk stockings....beautiful...you always get me....urban
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On Saturday, November 15, 2003, Lemons
(46) wrote:
This is a wonderful poem. I enjoy it.
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On Saturday, November 15, 2003, sole
(93) wrote:
Wow, I've just started reading your work and it's absolutely phenomenal. Nothing more I can say really. It's honestly a joy to read.
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On Wednesday, November 12, 2003, Exodus
(172) wrote:
My favorite part, is purchased kiss....damn i love that line...
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On Tuesday, November 4, 2003, Drifter
(265) wrote:
Damn your good.
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A former member wrote:
No Comment !! Wonderull!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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On Tuesday, November 4, 2003, KittyStryker
(710) wrote:
oh i love this cre.... so sad, anguish softly falling over the reader like snowflakes... only thing i don't like is knowing you feel this way...
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A former member wrote:
I agree with Six on this. I am never disappointed when I read your work and each time I am left with more appreciation and this one is just incredible. "Freeze this pain As you do the falling rain" Awsome, just awsome. ~Urban Shipwreck~
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A former member wrote:
Oh yah and another reason January needs to hurry is that I can finally go back to the states for a month:p
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A former member wrote:
Cre, how is it you leave all us little people down here below wishing and dreaming we could capture a picture, an emotion, as well as you do? This was...beyond words. I believe I will use the famouse line also. "I love this one!"
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On Tuesday, November 4, 2003, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
Just when I think you're the best...you put out something like this...and I realize, you're far better than the best.
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On Tuesday, November 4, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(509) wrote:
Your words are cold lace here. Grace dancing on a snow flakes crystal. So cold and silent...waiting for that storm of nothing that will bring something. ~bites lip~ I don't know what to say. It sounds repetitive to say....oh I love this....but "Oh I love
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On Tuesday, November 4, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(509) wrote:
"Oh I love this one." ~JMDW~