Wrong Turn
By Just Dave
She came into my life and messed with my head
She broke up my marriage and torched my wife's bed
She drove them away, they didn't feel safe
Brought on by me with my lust and disgrace
She ripped out my heart but left it right there
Still stuck in my chest, too painful to bear
She called up the cops and told them great lies
She unleashed her minions, her family of spies
She said good-bye, while spilling my blood
By using a knife instead of a hug
Too hurt to run, too shocked to feel pain
She thrust it again and whispered my name
"I'm watching you die", that bitch said to me
As she tousled my hair and giggled with glee
She left me to bleed, my life to reflect
After gutting my home of love and respect
But her time is here, she waits in her cell
It comes to an end at mornings first bellĀ
The deal has been signed, this time she will fall
Breaking her knees from the weight of it all
If she should get out, to all our dismay
I'm speaking the truth so hear what I say
I survived her wrath and I'm doing just fine
But so help me God she will not survive mine
Comments on "Wrong Turn"
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On Thursday, July 25, 2019, Dilated View
(582) wrote:
The absolute chaos and rage in this was astounding. I've worked with people who behave this way professionally rather than with your home family and it is absolutely sickening. Everyone is a stepping stone to the goal that can't be reached for people like this because they always move the goal post and are never satisfied with their wake of destruction. As for the structure of the poem itself your rhyme scheme was great and kept the flow going from start to finish. Very well written format and content wise. Awesome job!
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On Sunday, June 2, 2019, Michael J Smith
(16) wrote:
Did you win your wife back? My wife would kill me.lol
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On Saturday, June 1, 2019, Divine hell
(238) wrote:
She will reap the consequences of her actions one way or another. A tremendously well written poem, I can feel the fire in these words.
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A former member wrote:
Really enjoyed this. This woman sounds like a bit##
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A former member wrote:
A very honest and brilliant ink. Revenge is sweet.
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On Friday, March 9, 2018, PoetessDarkly
(693) wrote:
superb write
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On Sunday, January 28, 2018, Dreamscape
(22) wrote:
It sounds like you should give that girl a second chance. Kidding. Interesting poem.
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A former member wrote:
We, as human beings, can only take so much before giving an unrepentant offender a taste of their own medicine. Then they usually want to cry foul. I've always enjoyed poems that cleverly rhyme, it adds a bit of a sing-song feel. You always do great work. Rebs:).
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On Wednesday, August 2, 2017, Mute Serenade
(389) wrote:
Amazing! I don't have anything deep or effectual I just think this is scathing and brilliant. Nailed to the spot.
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On Monday, July 24, 2017, Candy Cain
(49) wrote:
this is powerful.
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On Monday, May 22, 2017, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Sounding like a real "Fatal Attraction" bunny burner Dave. Some women just grab hold and won't let go - until the novelty wears-off. We takes our chances my friend - cheers! - Dan
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On Saturday, February 11, 2017, Drea
(1388) wrote:
I really enjoyed this. It had an infectious rhythm. You managed to tell a story from beginning to end. Nicely done.
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On Sunday, September 25, 2016, Gypsyeighty3
(45) wrote:
We always do something we come to regret, but I liked how you penned this. Kind of feel that dread of her ever getting out lol... nice job!
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On Saturday, September 24, 2016, 10 Forty Three
(543) wrote:
I greatly enjoyed this. Nice flow too and the ending was absolutely brilliant! Write on. - 10:43
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On Thursday, July 14, 2016, TropicalSnowstorm
(1580) wrote:
Interesting structure and piece! This effectively spun a story filed with anger and regret and guilt. Well done! Ciao, T/S
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A former member wrote:
I love the last few lines of this piece. "She will not survive mine," stole my thoughts for a moment. The execution of this piece is stunning. Great work, please continue to write and share with us!
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On Tuesday, June 14, 2016, soul_versing
(774) wrote:
Your opening is an attention grabber, and I can appreciate the overwhelmingly regretful tone. Your piece has a nice rhyme scheme and drives deep when you transitioned through raw emotion. And I have to say, I'm actually disappointed in the protagonist, "where's my damn donuts!?" ... . . . . .......don't mind me, infidelity makes me uncomfortable, but aside from that, a mighty fine and structured design. --TG
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On Tuesday, June 14, 2016, Just Dave
(448) wrote:
Thank you for the kind words. :)