I Thought About You Today
By Crystal Passion
I thought about you today...
always searching,
never finding-
the treasured love I lost
when you chose to leave
I thought about you today...
The day you left
darkness encaptured me.
Like a deteriorating disease,
it slowly ravaged my body
until all that was left were my final breathes...
tiny whispers ready to escape my lips at any moment.
I thought about you today...
You are my candy coated drug.
Sweetest on the outside,
but a dangerously explosive mixture on the inside,
which in large doses would become more deadly
than any other caution found within this hazardous world.
I thought about you today...
Ironic it seems
how that now you want to go,
I make you my priority.
When I had you, I neglected you.
When you left me, I stalked you.
What more can I give?
The world would be such a diminutive price to pay
for the most valuable lover of my life.
Just need only one lifetime in your arms....
I thought about you today....
but...
Didn't you know?
that today...
is everyday
Comments on " I Thought About You Today"
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On Sunday, December 23, 2007, italianbella
(183) wrote:
outstanding write:)
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A former member wrote:
awww I loved this it was very sweet:] favs indeed:]
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A former member wrote:
awaked so many memories - what painful yet pleasurable memories - thanks for your post
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A former member wrote:
this captured my every attention. i feel the same pain, almost EXACT same pain....and your style of writing reminds me of my style in a way...i really like it.
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A former member wrote:
I like this!!
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A former member wrote:
that was a beautiful work of art, excellent.
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On Friday, June 3, 2005, Yesterday
(12) wrote:
This is awesome. Just literally awesome. So beautiful and amazing, I'm honestly speechless. I think I'll fav this.
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A former member wrote:
I love it!!!
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On Thursday, May 26, 2005, Sin
(1135) wrote:
this was beautiful in its aching...the painful yearning of that which we lost..you portrayed it with flawless grace ~kristy
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On Thursday, May 26, 2005, void
(35) wrote:
amazing write i can relate to this. ~V~
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On Wednesday, May 25, 2005, Serenity
(469) wrote:
"I thought about you today.... but... Didn't you know? that today... is everyday" That line fits perfectly. Amazing write :)
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A former member wrote:
"You are my candy coated drug.
Sweetest on the outside,
but a dangerously explosive mixture on the inside,
" i love this line and the way you expressed such love but then again the hate that you have for taking it
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A former member wrote:
This is curiously haunting and devouring with it's tender scent of yearning and sadness. It seems a fragility that should be held with care. Very tearful but rather irresistable. Masterly expressed. ~*~ Rose ~*~
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A former member wrote:
wow...i like the way you expressed your love but hate at the same time this touched me and i can relate
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A former member wrote:
this was very deep very depressing great word usage this in one word was amazing
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On Sunday, July 18, 2004, Rebel_Angel
(321) wrote:
I like this! I sometimes have days like that, not always though.
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On Wednesday, June 9, 2004, Lexicon
(40) wrote:
This piece was awesome, for lack of a better term. This reminds me of so many other things in my life.
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On Monday, May 24, 2004, aXe FactoR
(333) wrote:
was listening to a sad chinese love song while reading this piece. both this poem and the song almost brought tears to my eyes. i really liked the last 3 sentences. the emotions were raw and so heartfelt. awesome. just awesome.
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A former member wrote:
I have a poem similar to this, but probably not half as well written. It's funny how you can't really open your eyes until you're forced to.
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On Wednesday, November 19, 2003, Delphoid-Q
(213) wrote:
I likes. It speaks to me ;)
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On Tuesday, October 28, 2003, DarkDruidess
(313) wrote:
This really grabbed my attention...of course it fits my life right now...I don't know whether to thank you for the tears it brought but this is a wonderful poem full of emotion....
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A former member wrote:
That was smooth. I can dig it.
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On Tuesday, September 30, 2003, GreekPhilosopher
(156) wrote:
I Thought I Commented On This... Curious. Anyway To Be Brief: I Liked. GPhD.
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A former member wrote:
when there is this much commentary, it seems almost without point or substance to even say anything, but if it makes a difference, its a beautiful piece that made me want to cry and laugh at the same time.
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A former member wrote:
i liked it...really i did
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On Tuesday, September 2, 2003, OLd SouL
(717) wrote:
the next time someone says I thought about you today, I swear I'm going to flip out. Actually, I'll just smile and think about this poem. Thanks.
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On Wednesday, September 3, 2003, Crystal Passion
(221) wrote:
The next time I see someone flip out I shall smile and fondly think of you too Soul :D
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A former member wrote:
A very moving love poem. The ending summed it up swell. Yay!
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A former member wrote:
this is really really good. its sad to see that you missed the opportunity to be with this person further, but once you lose something, it is unsafe to dwell upon it. hopefully the poetry helped relieve some of it.
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On Tuesday, September 2, 2003, Crystal Passion
(221) wrote:
believe it or not I appreciate and value your opinion
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A former member wrote:
i know it does when i write when im sad. :)
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A former member wrote:
I really liked the powerful ending. "Didn't you know that today is everyday" Great write and look forward to reading more of yours in the future ~Urban Shipwreck~
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On Sunday, August 31, 2003, Rebel_Angel
(321) wrote:
Very good! Yeah I did see the style before... I like the candy coated part!
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On Sunday, August 31, 2003, _Andrew_
(245) wrote:
beautiful kryz, couldn't help but notice the style as well, hehe, nice write *~*aNDReW*~*
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On Tuesday, September 2, 2003, Crystal Passion
(221) wrote:
I had the best inspiration from a particularly powerful old flame...
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On Sunday, August 31, 2003, Demosthenes
(155) wrote:
lovely start. keep this up and youll be a great asset to the site. i like it when people have vocabularies. i just pretend thesauruses dont exist and everyone actually knows all these words. and if they really do know them, then theyre extra cool. and if
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On Sunday, August 31, 2003, Demosthenes
(155) wrote:
they dont, then i dont care, because im out of my mind. good job. -B
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On Sunday, August 31, 2003, Demosthenes
(155) wrote:
i think i misspelled asset... -B
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A former member wrote:
Quite good. The verse starting "You are my candy-coated drug" caught me for some reason...
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On Tuesday, September 2, 2003, Crystal Passion
(221) wrote:
LoL It was the candy wasnt it?
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On Sunday, August 31, 2003, Ophelia
(221) wrote:
very nice, liked it much, , , O.
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On Sunday, August 31, 2003, The Fallen Angel
(234) wrote:
Beautiful and enjoyable to read...flowed with excellent repitition!+Fallen One+
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On Sunday, August 31, 2003, The Fallen Angel
(234) wrote:
keep it up!
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On Saturday, May 1, 2004, Anth
(1126) wrote:
just stunning, to capture these thoughts and portray with such flowing beauty, the continous theme and the ending further enhances how special this poem is