Undeclared

By freudian-slip

His finger traced across the top of my lip
light enough i could feel the air
under it
bottom eyelashes dark lined against hazel eyes
pulling me in with each
blink
and I sigh quiet enough to still make out
his nervous tension
I've never done this
he said
and for an instant I almost knew
he was glad he did

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Copyright 2012 freudian-slip
Published on Friday, November 9, 2012.     Filed under: "Personal" and "Poetry"
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  • Jonas Robinson On Wednesday, October 23, 2019, Jonas Robinson (1012)By person wrote:

    Beautiful I enjoyed this because of the half-rhymes that made it much better than normal rhymes. Thank you for sharing, and congrats. :)

  • Intoxicating Delirium On Monday, March 3, 2014, Intoxicating Delirium (400)By person wrote:

    Wow! This is so fantastically descriptive... What a tempting picture... Great write!! :)

  • Sketso On Monday, December 9, 2013, Sketso (455)By person wrote:

    Huzzah! Does that say enough? Quite the marvel how you capture "moments" so simply.

  • Dejected_Worth On Sunday, December 8, 2013, Dejected_Worth (129)By person wrote:

    As amazing as always. This is why I love you

  • freudian-slip On Sunday, December 8, 2013, freudian-slip (246)By person wrote:

    love u too:)

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Friday, June 7, 2013, TropicalSnowstorm (1722)By person wrote:

    Great piece! Love the mysterious and sensual nature of it. Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • eidos On Saturday, November 10, 2012, eidos (53)By person wrote:

    I love short poems. This one was a slow build up, it felt like a storm approaching knowing that it'll kill you. Then the ending, pow. I'm reeling. Great write.

  • FadedBlues On Friday, November 9, 2012, FadedBlues (2958)By person wrote:

    ...this is just vague enough (for me) that it allows me to envision several different scenarios, some probably far removed from your intent...

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