Please; Don't.
By Aleas
She bred in me
What's dead in me
And lead me
To the indebted and undoubted
Irresistible silence of one single breath
But I was better off
Without it...
Breathe in
But please leave it be
Because your next words might very well
Become the living end of me
I'm kneeling at our fountain
Tossing pennies
Making wishes and praying the bucket doesn't tip
Wondering if,
When, and how
We ever let it slip
And now
It's all coming down
In a hailstorm of poison laced javelin declarations
To sucking chest wounds
Target: Heart
Laid to rest...
Breathe in
Take it in
Speak not and hold it in
Until your heart quickens
Then ceases
Don't trust in me to pick up the pieces
Because what you're going to say
Isn't going to erase
A lifetime of collective sighs
Severed ties
Elicit lies and exit signs
When escape leads to the same place, anyways
One single breath
Is all it takes
To shatter everything I hold onto
One single breath
Is all it takes
To say...
"...I love you."
Comments on "Please; Don't."
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A former member wrote:
You break me each time I read your work. I almost have to pause between the times I read just to catch a breath. I didn't breathe much through this one. It captivated me from top to bottom. You have a way that makes all who read fall instantly in love.
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On Tuesday, January 26, 2010, Dilated View
(582) wrote:
Beautiful and crushing. The second to last stanza really blew me away, very much enjoyed your word usage throughout. Excellent read, thank you for sharing.
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On Tuesday, December 9, 2008, brie_leigh
(6) wrote:
I like the begingin when you say "i was better off without it" hearing the words i love you can be so wonderful and so horrible/scary at the same time....but sometimes going back isnt the best thing in the world....this was another AMAZING one.....
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On Tuesday, July 1, 2008, Sketso
(416) wrote:
Your writes are striking chords with me recently, friend. But I add, purely from my perspective, that escape leads back to the ladder, there is no running from the fire... we burn in smiling torment.
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On Wednesday, July 2, 2008, Aleas
(169) wrote:
Ah, but there is still always a choice at the bottom of that ladder. Do I climb it yet again? Smiling torment, self torture? How Matrix-esque. Plug me in. I love steak, too.
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A former member wrote:
"A life time of collective sighs severed ties Elicit lies and exit signs" you can bring that word play till the cows come home, really well felt write mate.
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On Monday, June 30, 2008, Crush Room
(22) wrote:
'a hail storm of poison laced javelin declarations' - phenominal line...awesome write xx
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On Monday, June 30, 2008, Narcissa
(391) wrote:
In the last stanza I felt that everything depends in that one breath...since at any given moment anything can happen...You have my chest tied in knots.
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A former member wrote:
love the italicized notions; of afterthoughts and hidden dreams. . .. ness