Comments by Aleas
- "I think, from what I've read of you from the beginning submission to now, that you have shown tremendous growth, both in talent and maturity. Simply put, you got game, lass."
Posted by Aleas on "Rippled Verses. " by soul_versing
- "Ha haaaaa! Yes! You have no idea the big ass smile this put on my face. I think/I hope you know why, and to that end, I say, very good, young padawan."
Posted by Aleas on "Epilogue" by malevolencefixation
- "It does feel a little stunted, a bit of a mouthful at times. Taken in context, we have seen you bare your fangs! The high road, the path most travel? Should never have expected: no code for the feral. =p Cheers, mate."
Posted by Aleas on "Ferocity" by mikeygreenleaf
- "This! ...is what i've been wanting to read from here since i came back. A schematic, structured poem, rhymed, clever and with a punch. Finally! Someone, point me to more!"
Posted by Aleas on "Morphine (Buyers Remorse)" by mikeygreenleaf
- "God pieces for me are always very tricky. Perhaps it's just because i feel it's impossible to comprehend something...impossible. The devil - that's possible. It's so simple to imagine the depravity one can reach. It's not so easy to conceive the opposite. I found myself wishing that I was taken on more of a personal journey, though still sacred, and less a commentary on "we"/all of us. However, again, to be honest, I think I should have come back to this at a later time, as I may have tainted myself with the rapid repeat of several words in the first half of the piece (my stupid peeves!). I'm sorry! Cheers."
Posted by Aleas on "Skeletons" by malevolencefixation
- "An honest critique coinciding with a pet peeve in poetry of mine (I don't have many, I promise), was the repeat of a word at the very beginning. You say ..."once upon a time, very long ago, there was a time..." My mind is beset with redundancy. It thinks 'once upon a time itself suggests very long ago' and 'once upon a time...there was a time' - too many times! And then my tiny puppy brought me his tiny frisbee and i lost track of reality. Onward to the rest of the poem, now, in feeling, and not in grammar. Cheers!"
Posted by Aleas on "Skeletons" by malevolencefixation
- "Never felt so helpless, never wanted it more. That moment...a definitive "oooooh shit" moment where the end product can't be known as positive or negative until regret sinks in. I love those moments. Those types of moments, they disappear with marriage, don't they? But, he does not seem the trespasser. These are woods you've wandered and barred yourself from. The walls, they didn't fall away; you stepped outside of them, into a known unknown where his fingers and lips were waiting for you. Or...that's where my mind travels here. =p Cheers!"
Posted by Aleas on "Trespasser" by Magdalena
- "We don't. That's the saddest part. Used to be a city of millions could band together, click refresh on their current government, and start anew. Now, a city of a million dissenters can be reduced to charred corpses in seconds with a simple phone call and the iron will of someone brainwashed enough to follow the order. I fear a million arms with a million guns no longer stands a chance in this day. But, I'm a bit of a pessimist, as they say. Cheers."
Posted by Aleas on " O! My Beloved Country!" by saatyaki
- "I read this in a cheeky, late 50's early 60's pop song kind of way. It's got a great melody and I truly think it could be a hit back then. I wish there was a way i could sing this to you and not feel like a crazy person in the comments, but...yeah, that's not going to happen. Bottom line, it made me feel good in a "I Wanna Hold Your Hand" kind of way."
Posted by Aleas on "On a Personal Note" by closermike
- "It's only a matter of time...before...beautiful is something you feel....rather than something you see. "
Posted by Aleas on "Insecure" by Phantasmagoria
- "You aren't here anymore, but ill respond anyway, just cuz. Right before tepid I use the word cloudless - this I am aware becomes paradoxical - except right before cloudless I use "surprisingly". Every word has it's place. Always."
Posted by Aleas on "The Hint I Missed." by Aleas
- "Again, one of your contemporaries once write "a word's a word and nothing more" -yet, unsurprisingly he took himself just a tad too serious for my judgment. Was this write specifically about Silent... =P"
Posted by Aleas on "His Skin & Bones" by Godot
- " Either it's been awhile or I just don't pay attention. Thinks it has just been awhile. You're back (to form). Enjoy 10 minute stays and poems quickly buried! I know I do. "
Posted by Aleas on "Awaken Me; Awake In Me." by Echoes of Orpheus
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