Slow Motion In A Dream

By LOKI

Im a simple man
I want simple things
I build my life
around simplicity
Yet it gets complicated
Like running slow motion in a dream
when they tell you to be something
you dont want to be

But,I dont wear that mask
because I am not afraid
I am who I am
I would'nt hide it for a thing
Some say thats my weakness
believe me its my strength
Im just passing through this world
no one will remember me

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© 2006 LOKI
Published on Sunday, November 12, 2006.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Alchemist On Tuesday, November 29, 2011, Alchemist (679)By person wrote:

    Your works speak to me, yes, there are people on this site who are better writers than you but your work has power that theirs don't. After the last few pieces I have read of yours I think your my new favorite poet and now I have to read all your poetry.

  • A former member wrote: You see thats the craziest thing. Do you or do you not want to be remembered. My Biggest fear is passing through life unremembered. I pray daily I do something I can be remembered for. I strive for it. I want it, I NEED IT!! ][ ][

  • LOKI On Sunday, November 12, 2006, LOKI (161)By person wrote:

    tahnk you all for the feed back I appreciate your thoughts

  • A former member wrote: i will remember you my friend. very powerful write.

  • Lady Grinning Soul On Sunday, November 12, 2006, Lady Grinning Soul (143)By person wrote:

    this was beautiful, straight to the point, although i would also agree with carlos because people will remember you even if you think you are passing through the world.

  • Alanarchy On Sunday, November 12, 2006, Alanarchy (1168)By person wrote:

    Great write. Straight to the point. Write on.

  • Aunty Depressant On Sunday, November 12, 2006, Aunty Depressant (423)By person wrote:

    Yes, sometimes it is the voices outside our heads out to get us! Being face naked in society in itself complicates things!I agree with Carlos tho-cause I wondered if you had left. So there! A:D.

  • carlosjackal On Sunday, November 12, 2006, carlosjackal (2788)By person wrote:

    A fantastic poem. I would only change the last line as I believe you're likely to be remembered for being yourself than hiding behind a mask.

  • SilentStalker On Sunday, November 12, 2006, SilentStalker (1047)By person wrote:

    ...true, but at least if you do it right, some people will spend a lifetime trying to forget you... Scholar

  • Alanarchy On Sunday, November 12, 2006, Alanarchy (1168)By person wrote:

    lol!

  • LOKI On Sunday, November 12, 2006, LOKI (161)By person wrote:

    I live by it

  • elisa On Sunday, November 12, 2006, elisa (1595)By person wrote:

    beautifully exposed..... captures the true nakedness of my soul.... amazing.

  • LOKI On Sunday, November 12, 2006, LOKI (161)By person wrote:

    thank you I was inspired by a quote Better to be hated for who you are than loved for who your not

  • elisa On Sunday, November 12, 2006, elisa (1595)By person wrote:

    wisdom... at it's best.

  • blue On Sunday, November 12, 2006, blue (1409)By person wrote:

    hai.

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