acrid
By Six-Out
no pain:no pain:no pain- to the vein of yourself
like a gun in my mouth: trigger:release- and in a .flash. [it's over]
life- or what we once perceived as such:futile it seemed
dreams broke.n/ shattered into tiny pieces of static-cling psuedo.reality
nothingmore:nothingless - forget what's been said
and say it again. because nothing is cliche when you're dead
an insignificant cross/road- humbled and tossed aside
a figment of what can be lost. and what can be lost is nothing. not anymore
dried up- on the floor and bored into. like a fleeting glance
a freeing glance of almost nevers and [always] tomorrows
-it's always tomorrow. until tomorrow is yesterday
bite the bullet. and kiss eternity
smoke filled lungs and a wall painted red- textured to match
this is life- what it is seen as:futile as it is
open your mouth now- and taste forever
Comments on "acrid"
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On Saturday, November 13, 2004, cre
(410) wrote:
I love "nothing is cliche when you're dead" and "it's always tomorrow. until tomorrow is yesterday" . . once again, very quotable and so vividly written. Well done. I love the word acrid . .
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On Thursday, November 11, 2004, Revolting Theatre
(31) wrote:
sweet write - josh
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A former member wrote:
you just inspired me ty
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On Monday, November 8, 2004, sIo
(898) wrote:
I LOVE IT!!!
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A former member wrote:
fuck. you should make this into an independent film. vivid and such. im loving it. i always love you.
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A former member wrote:
vivid definatly the word i would use to describe this piece. i think i would acctually compare it to some chuck palahniuks writings.
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On Monday, November 8, 2004, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
powerful write indeed, with fantastic driving pace... Damn excellent.
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A former member wrote:
The taste in my mouth is wonderfully...acrid. I thank you for this.
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A former member wrote:
Astounding . . wonderfully paramount ~Rose.
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A former member wrote:
"open your mouth now- and taste forever this will most likely be gone soon" ~ the poem was utter brilliance . . it immobolized me. But you will notice i quoted particular lines . . these are two of the most exquisite lines I have read in a long while. Ast
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On Monday, November 8, 2004, Solace
(1065) wrote:
*goggles* wow man, i need gloves when handling your work...Taste Forever, Nothing Is Cliche When Your Dead...Enthralling exhortation indeed...