seventeen years

By Jonas

yea, and the three of them
they drank
and danced wildly around the fire
in the high desert
they sang
the phone never rang to interupt the primal communion
as the expanse offered nothing to bounce
a signal off of
and the wind blew
cold
and the wind blew
strong
feeling its way through all the cracks in the rock
and they all laughed at god
because it couldn't touch them here
not with the fire high
warm sweet mesquite smoke
and brandy in coffee softened the divine reminder
so that it wasn't much more than
an incantation whispered
that raised small pin pricks on their skin
it reminded them
briefly
that to live is to
die

and if you were walking by
you wouldn't see them
unless they saw you

and if you were watching
from a mountain
the moon would shine through them
you wouldn't hear a sound

god is the
question
of darkness or dreams
when the sand swallows your bones

they all fell in a drunken heap
laughing
without reservation
laughing
and the coyotes sang along
and the glass in the sand
laughed at the moon
and their eyes heard the sound that it made
spinning in an infinite voice
that never thought of
wanting answers
because there were no questions
and the world
it kept spinning even though
they had stopped dancing

all the millions of little points of light
became circles to their eyes
the connections
and presumptions in existence
between the eyes and the mind
softened and unsure
by brandy
and feelings of permanence

they looked up at the stars and all fell
silent
breath came heavy
and rhythmic
the fire
embers
and the chaines rattled because the mind
remembered that they were
there

and if you were walking by
you wouldn't see them
unless they saw you

and if you were watching
from a mountain
the moon would shine through them
you wouldn't hear a sound

god is the
question
evangalists answer with
gold

yea, and the three they split
into two and one


the two held onto each other and pushed into each other
and moved together and tried to force their flesh to breath
together to bind together though they knew they couldn't
win

and the one smiled at the sky
found no communion
but wasn't particularly looking

in the end
they
all three stared in sepparate unity
into the expansive sky
and absorbed the light from the stars
that had travelled so far
and so long
to get to them there

one after another they drifted
drifted off to sleep
and found dreams that were each
their
own

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Copyright 2004 Fish
Published on Thursday, June 10, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: This write, is so amazing, I'm not sure what to say.

  • A former member wrote: uff gave me goosebumps

  • liquid_emotion On Friday, July 23, 2004, liquid_emotion (323)By person wrote:

    You know, I was there once. As lost as it now is, it's never really the same again. Cheers

  • sixsixnine On Thursday, July 22, 2004, sixsixnine (477)By person wrote:

    such talent! i swear the second time around i got a completly diffrent feel.. ATOMIC! fish, this hits for you! *669*

  • sixsixnine On Wednesday, July 21, 2004, sixsixnine (477)By person wrote:

    this is like a religious expirience, i mean it was like reading about the trinity & why we must twist questions of divinity & mortality.. such work as this comes only from the mind of someone who knows what most don'tso deep & intense* i must read again*

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Tuesday, July 20, 2004, TropicalSnowstorm (1703)By person wrote:

    "it reminded them briefly that to live is to die". The fleeting excercises, which are, in truth, rituals to assist us in denying this simple truth... Scholar

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Tuesday, July 20, 2004, TropicalSnowstorm (1703)By person wrote:

    Do we simply rot, or do we answer for our deeds? Did the world really 'stand still' on some day of importance to us, or did we momentarily lose touch with something that never does... Scholar

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Tuesday, July 20, 2004, TropicalSnowstorm (1703)By person wrote:

    The difficult truth is always lurking outside like a voyeur to peer through the window of our carefully constructed, beautiful home of self denial...and all we can do is pretend we didn't see him there...leering and touching himself... Scholar

  • Anth On Tuesday, July 20, 2004, Anth (1133)By person wrote:

    i love the wording of this,ive read many times now,theres so much to take in,the whole thing unique,fresh even,incredible the expanse bound in esp you painted,there was something spiritually primal about this ,a spectacular piece

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Tuesday, July 20, 2004, TropicalSnowstorm (1703)By person wrote:

    amused by our discomfort with acknowledging his presence. Sigh...I need another vodka drink and maybe I'll throw in an action flick that tells me if I am just focused enough, I can beat the odds... Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • Stranger On Friday, July 9, 2004, Stranger (264)By person wrote:

    Notebooks out, class is in session. Flawless! Compelling in its reading; crisp and taut in its structure. A perfect blossom dipped in gold displayed on a crystal shelf. Magnifico!!!

  • nell On Thursday, June 17, 2004, nell (271)By person wrote:

    yuo never cease to boggle minds fish and this is no exception, simply beautiful.. holds alot of truth

  • birdwell On Monday, June 14, 2004, birdwell (140)By person wrote:

    this poem holds so much of what i adore, and respect in, and about your writing. a surreal journey through the all-embracing ocean of one fish ~db~

  • purr_verse On Saturday, June 12, 2004, purr_verse (1059)By person wrote:

    grabbed me from the magnificent opening and didn't let go... absolutely first-class words from your hand again. just fantastic. :)

  • urbanhumility On Friday, June 11, 2004, urbanhumility (1175)By person wrote:

    so beautiful, what an experience, i like your parallels here. once again memory solidified in fishessence.......well done.......urban

  • KittyStryker On Friday, June 11, 2004, KittyStryker (711)By person wrote:

    the people you desribe remind me somewhat of the animal people in "Someplace to be Flying"... beautifully written...

  • flying_fox On Friday, June 11, 2004, flying_fox (573)By person wrote:

    the images just kept rushing through my brain...some fantabulous word marriages, such as "and brandy in coffee softened the divine reminder". The whole piece for me had

  • flying_fox On Friday, June 11, 2004, flying_fox (573)By person wrote:

    flashes of Jim Morrison and Nick Cave - I hope you don't take that as a criticism becuase it is high praise. The whole piece is an amazing concept.

  • Six-Out On Thursday, June 10, 2004, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    shit

  • glasshouse On Thursday, June 10, 2004, glasshouse (548)By person wrote:

    "god is the question of darkness or dreams when the sand swallows your bones" Wow. This is amazing. So many pictures painted... so many questions revealed. I loved this piece. Very fluid. Good job. -Glass

  • Liz On Friday, June 18, 2004, Liz (267)By person wrote:

    Those quoted lines were my favorite, also. The story about the people didn't seem to hold much of interest, though. Disappointing, from you.

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