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Purposelessness
By Purposelessness
Purposelessness
First in, best dressed
Adventure awaits
As I consider my fate
Golden skies in which to soar
Darkened forests to explore
All this knowledge I could gain
Wondrous thrust upon my brain
Beauty of body, and of mind
Beauty hidden, but simple to find
Introspective I examine
Insufficient trace of drive
Severe motivation famine
Once I thought I was alive
Swiftly reality slams in
All my futures I deprive
I am the mammoth
and the flea
I am the spider
and the fly
Everything I can do
But I sit here in filth
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Author's Note:
Sometimes we give up, even when it's wondrous to keep going.Comments on "Purposelessness"
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A former member wrote:
I haven't heard a poem that rhymes in forever. You put this piece together really well.
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A former member wrote:
This sounded like an experience with out of body or astral projection in a way to me. Just an intepretation from a humble fan of your piece. Well done, poet.
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On Tuesday, March 7, 2017, Purposelessness
(150)
wrote:
That's a good angle. What if we could view all of our decisions in life from outside our minds?
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On Thursday, March 2, 2017, Jerry stiles
(251) wrote:
Great write,,first in,,and best dressed,,sounds like a marine.,,
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On Friday, March 3, 2017, Purposelessness
(150) wrote:
I'm not a marine, but "I've been known to be quite handsome, in a certain angle and a certain light" as one of my favourite wordsmiths has said.
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On Friday, March 3, 2017, Purposelessness
(150) wrote:
That's Nick Cave, I feel I should mention.
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On Thursday, March 2, 2017, Lux
(299) wrote:
"Wake up in the morning, see your sunrise loves to go down." - Words from a wise witchy woman. This is what I think, feel, breathe, am. Write on.
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On Friday, March 3, 2017, Purposelessness
(150) wrote:
Very wise. Which witch wrote this?
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On Wednesday, November 1, 2017, Lux
(299) wrote:
Sorry! Just saw this. That would be Stevie Nicks, my dear.
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On Thursday, March 2, 2017, Drea
(1443) wrote:
I agree with Kaiser. That part was my favorite. I enjoyed this.
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On Friday, March 3, 2017, Purposelessness
(150) wrote:
Thank you Drea.
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On Wednesday, March 1, 2017, dwells
(4284) wrote:
Life can be long Purp and guessing the social media might have you addicted maybe? Nothing stays the same forever - but it can seem like that. Cheers! - Dan
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On Friday, March 3, 2017, Purposelessness
(150) wrote:
Thanks Dan :)
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On Wednesday, March 1, 2017, Queazenart
(212) wrote:
The "I am... And..." section I guess represents a self-perpetuating cycle - An Ourobouros sort of thing. The title grabbed me and the last line is so negative and blunt that I just had to smile. The images and word choice in stanza two were a bit bland, but nice poem overall.
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On Wednesday, March 1, 2017, Queazenart
(212) wrote:
Oh, and I just noticed your name. XD Well done.
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On Friday, March 3, 2017, Purposelessness
(150) wrote:
Thanks for commenting, I appreciate any criticisms, as it helps me to improve and gain another perspective into my writing. I'd like to portray some monotony with the rhyming in stanza 2, while still showing that there are wondrous things to accomplish (according to others). Altogether that stanza is meant to show what there is available to apply myself to - and that is the very reason why I choose to do nothing. Not one thing. I was going for a show of how we are given a 'standard' for what we are expected to aim for, what we are expected to achieve - and how it's just rubbish. And why not throw a little millennial apathy right in with it. Thanks for your comment and I'm always down for some technical analysis and coaching :)
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