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Marco Polo
By Bluegirl
"Marco"
I'm in a pool
with friends
"Polo"
They answer
Giggling
"Marco"
They are all
Pretending they are having fun...
"Polo"
They say, and begin to inch away from me
"Marco"
They are trying to avoid me
Not in game, but in life
"Polo"
Their voices get distant
And I am beginning to see it...
Through closed eyes
"Marco"
I chant again
As they slowly leave the pool
"Polo" The last one chants
As they walk away
"Marco..."
My voice trails
My arms drop
And I realize-
I have been abandoned,
Yet again.
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Copyright 2003 Bluegirl
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On Thursday, June 16, 2005, Sticky Kitty
(242)
wrote:
wow -kitty
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On Thursday, December 18, 2003, Rebel_Angel
(321) wrote:
oh man this sucks, I so know how that goes, and I often feel the same way. Very Good Write!
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On Sunday, October 5, 2003, yslehc
(334) wrote:
wow good job i really love how you turned a little kids game into a sad but true peice of life
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On Wednesday, September 24, 2003, TropicalSnowstorm
(1703) wrote:
This is still such a great poem - you are very talented and your new works continue to get better. You rock! Ciao, T/S
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A former member wrote:
This is another poem that struck a hard note inside me...I had many friends just desert me, like the way you described in your peom! ~Mercy~
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On Wednesday, September 10, 2003, Raze Drake
(85) wrote:
so trueful.........reality.
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On Wednesday, September 10, 2003, KittyStryker
(711) wrote:
beautifully written... i understand the feelings here really well... but sometimes, we think those people are gone and they've just been underwater, not responding because they couldn't hear you. sometimes they really do leave. it's hard...
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On Wednesday, September 10, 2003, KittyStryker
(711) wrote:
but it's up to us to decide which is which, y'know? ::hug::
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On Tuesday, September 9, 2003, Delilah
(113) wrote:
Made me sad...but I caught the meaning...good work..~Delilah~
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On Tuesday, September 9, 2003, urbanhumility
(1175) wrote:
very interesting, the correlation of a childhood game to the solem feelings we feel.......freudian one might say........urban
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On Tuesday, September 9, 2003, manywalks
(750) wrote:
What an empty feeling this gave me, as if all those around me were leaving mu own little private pool, well done. ~ mw
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