Marco Polo

By Bluegirl

"Marco"
I'm in a pool
with friends
"Polo"
They answer
Giggling
"Marco"
They are all
Pretending they are having fun...
"Polo"
They say, and begin to inch away from me
"Marco"
They are trying to avoid me
Not in game, but in life
"Polo"
Their voices get distant
And I am beginning to see it...
Through closed eyes
"Marco"
I chant again
As they slowly leave the pool
"Polo" The last one chants
As they walk away
"Marco..."
My voice trails
My arms drop
And I realize-
I have been abandoned,
Yet again.

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Copyright 2003 Bluegirl
Published on Tuesday, September 9, 2003.     Filed under: "Depressed" and "Poetry"
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  • Sticky Kitty On Thursday, June 16, 2005, Sticky Kitty (241)By person wrote:

    wow -kitty

  • Rebel_Angel On Thursday, December 18, 2003, Rebel_Angel (321)By person wrote:

    oh man this sucks, I so know how that goes, and I often feel the same way. Very Good Write!

  • yslehc On Sunday, October 5, 2003, yslehc (334)By person wrote:

    wow good job i really love how you turned a little kids game into a sad but true peice of life

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Wednesday, September 24, 2003, TropicalSnowstorm (1580)By person wrote:

    This is still such a great poem - you are very talented and your new works continue to get better. You rock! Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • A former member wrote: This is another poem that struck a hard note inside me...I had many friends just desert me, like the way you described in your peom! ~Mercy~ Scholar

  • Raze Drake On Wednesday, September 10, 2003, Raze Drake (85)By person wrote:

    so trueful.........reality.

  • KittyStryker On Wednesday, September 10, 2003, KittyStryker (710)By person wrote:

    beautifully written... i understand the feelings here really well... but sometimes, we think those people are gone and they've just been underwater, not responding because they couldn't hear you. sometimes they really do leave. it's hard...

  • KittyStryker On Wednesday, September 10, 2003, KittyStryker (710)By person wrote:

    but it's up to us to decide which is which, y'know? ::hug::

  • Delilah On Tuesday, September 9, 2003, Delilah (113)By person wrote:

    Made me sad...but I caught the meaning...good work..~Delilah~

  • urbanhumility On Tuesday, September 9, 2003, urbanhumility (1158)By person wrote:

    very interesting, the correlation of a childhood game to the solem feelings we feel.......freudian one might say........urban

  • manywalks On Tuesday, September 9, 2003, manywalks (747)By person wrote:

    What an empty feeling this gave me, as if all those around me were leaving mu own little private pool, well done. ~ mw

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