Circumstantial Evidence

By Maladroit

Goodbye?
It read like a paper-cut,
a dull rape of nociceptors-
microscopic mutilation,
an annoyance almost forgotten
until resentment sprouted lemon trees
and I went out picking for new fruit.

I propose we graduate to cheap knives,
hack self-explanatory wounds-
macroscopic warnings
then,
send out invitations to the salt

because pretending to forget each other is nothing like zinc

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Published on Sunday, July 28, 2013. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "Circumstantial Evidence"

A former member wrote: Wow, nicely written
On Tuesday, August 20, 2013, Void Vortex (298) wrote:

Hard poem. "send out invitations to the salt", badass! Much enjoyed!
On Monday, August 12, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx (332) wrote:

This was beautifully written... "send out invitations to the salt because pretending to forget each other is nothing like zinc" those last lines were flawless. xoxo
On Thursday, August 8, 2013, Six-Out (1423) wrote:

Your words bring feeling out that haven't been there in a long time. I missed reading you.
A former member wrote: Your flow is exquisite, your words slice through the eyes and ears like sharp blades. Great work..
A former member wrote: I guess it's my turn to feel like an asshole. Lerv.
On Tuesday, July 30, 2013, dwells (4177) wrote:

Enigmatic and still pondering the zinc (electrodes maybe?). Let the wounds proclaim so the mind doesn't have to bother with the words. Cheers and a pitcher of lemonade sounds great, lightly sweetened!
A former member wrote: Had to look up a word in this piece (guess which?)...I always love it when I learn big, fancy new words. You challenge the mind but this is acutely felt in the heart. I also like the imagery of resentment sprouting lemon trees. There is an angry dissatisfaction searching here. Thanks for this tough little gem, Maladroit.
On Sunday, July 28, 2013, FadedBlues (2096) wrote:

...stunning as always. all the bitterness of lemons...
On Sunday, July 28, 2013, Strataic (99) wrote:

Sometimes salt is needed.
On Sunday, July 28, 2013, tmanzano (207) wrote:

Zinc...How that just wraps it up in one word.
A former member wrote: I like the way you phased the salt in wounds metaphor, and this comes off elegant while exquisitely resentful.
On Sunday, July 28, 2013, FearlessDragon (137) wrote:

I really enjoy the choice of words and comparisons in this piece!
On Sunday, July 28, 2013, blue angel (866) wrote:

I love sophisticated resentments. ;)~ An microscopic catastrophe of raging enzymes calmly ravaging the system ~^_^~ Love it !!