Circumstantial Evidence

By Maladroit

Goodbye?
It read like a paper-cut,
a dull rape of nociceptors-
microscopic mutilation,
an annoyance almost forgotten
until resentment sprouted lemon trees
and I went out picking for new fruit.


I propose we graduate to cheap knives,
hack self-explanatory wounds-
macroscopic warnings
then, 
send out invitations to the salt

because pretending to forget each other is nothing like zinc

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Copyright 2013 Maladroit
Published on Sunday, July 28, 2013.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: Wow, nicely written

  • Void Vortex On Tuesday, August 20, 2013, Void Vortex (303)By person wrote:

    Hard poem. "send out invitations to the salt", badass! Much enjoyed!

  • xZombie Poptartzx On Monday, August 12, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx (334)By person wrote:

    This was beautifully written... "send out invitations to the salt because pretending to forget each other is nothing like zinc" those last lines were flawless. xoxo

  • Six-Out On Thursday, August 8, 2013, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Your words bring feeling out that haven't been there in a long time. I missed reading you.

  • A former member wrote: Your flow is exquisite, your words slice through the eyes and ears like sharp blades. Great work..

  • A former member wrote: I guess it's my turn to feel like an asshole. Lerv.

  • dwells On Tuesday, July 30, 2013, dwells (4288)By person wrote:

    Enigmatic and still pondering the zinc (electrodes maybe?). Let the wounds proclaim so the mind doesn't have to bother with the words. Cheers and a pitcher of lemonade sounds great, lightly sweetened!

  • A former member wrote: Had to look up a word in this piece (guess which?)...I always love it when I learn big, fancy new words. You challenge the mind but this is acutely felt in the heart. I also like the imagery of resentment sprouting lemon trees. There is an angry dissatisfaction searching here. Thanks for this tough little gem, Maladroit.

  • FadedBlues On Sunday, July 28, 2013, FadedBlues (2172)By person wrote:

    ...stunning as always. all the bitterness of lemons...

  • Strataic On Sunday, July 28, 2013, Strataic (100)By person wrote:

    Sometimes salt is needed. Scholar

  • tmanzano On Sunday, July 28, 2013, tmanzano (210)By person wrote:

    Zinc...How that just wraps it up in one word.

  • A former member wrote: I like the way you phased the salt in wounds metaphor, and this comes off elegant while exquisitely resentful.

  • FearlessDragon On Sunday, July 28, 2013, FearlessDragon (138)By person wrote:

    I really enjoy the choice of words and comparisons in this piece!

  • blue angel On Sunday, July 28, 2013, blue angel (877)By person wrote:

    I love sophisticated resentments. ;)~ An microscopic catastrophe of raging enzymes calmly ravaging the system ~^_^~ Love it !!


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