Black and Gold
By Stephanie Sideways
Gold shimmers and dark, bottomless pools
call from the shallow film
of my freshly mopped floor.
I sit
with no common sense
in a corner.
Melancholy meanders unwelcome through the moment
I daydream, and wait
for it to evaporate
My fingertips
hold a memory.
The gold is real and it floats
on the surface
in the dark .
You
There you are, and you are real.
I swim
in the fathoms
Reckless and unafraid
Here, I recall the memory
left at the end of my fingertips.
This fantasy place
of gold rolled thin ,
and black
bottomless pools
is the escape I chose.
The dark is a blessing
in my nakedness
with gold's caresses
When fantasy unfolds and lays
flat on the surface
Held up from below
shimmering as gold
To be lifted and kissed
Inviting, submerging my skin
What then?
Author's Note:
Really keen for people to give me feed back, good or bad on this one. What feelings does it evoke? What deeper feelings do you think I am trying to get across here? Does it work?Comments on "Black and Gold"
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On Monday, April 29, 2013, haunted
(837) wrote:
this is really an excellent poem stephanie. im in your kitchen staring at the wet floor and the next thing i know im off to this other world to escape in its reflection. i loved that you combined non-fiction into a fictional realm. im super impressed on this one. and so you know i can make a floor so shiny i can see up womens skirts. thats what i daydream about! lol...awesome!
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On Monday, April 29, 2013, Stephanie Sideways
(276) wrote:
Men love a wee glimpse of panties ! And I am not adversed to offering it! Hey, thanks. I think I will tweak it at some point as a few ideas keep popping into my head. But I am glad you liked it. Trying to move on from my silly rhymes. ( although they are still fun to write! ) x x x
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On Saturday, April 27, 2013, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
...you performed a task or obligation that left you stranded in a corner, but it doesn't seem to be permanent. the gold is thin & floats lightly, so it's insubstantial. it's not wise to thrash around recklessly in a black pool. hope I scored well in your pop quiz, Professor...
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On Monday, April 29, 2013, Stephanie Sideways
(276) wrote:
As I peer at you over my professor like glasses........... Definitely you have got the jist ! Funny what comes to mind whilst moping in the altogether. X x x
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On Saturday, April 27, 2013, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Mopped yourself into a corner I'd say, now you've gotta wait for it to dry. Happens to me everytime I do housework in the buff. Lovely analogy to something precious lost, and maybe precariously floating above the abyss, just beyond physical reach, but not beyond remembering. Well done and one of your best "serious" pieces, thanks Stephy!
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On Monday, April 29, 2013, Stephanie Sideways
(276) wrote:
Pretty much nailed it fella. Thanks for reading. Trying to work on this style, but can't resist silly rhymes every now and then. Even if I do stretch my syntax occasionally . Much love! X x x