Comments by nightshade
- "This one really makes me think of one of my family members. I must say this work was like the screeching of fingernails on a chalkboard."
Posted by nightshade on "Silent Asylum" by Deaths Apostle
- "I can see that this was something that not only was hard to decide but something you are still fighting with while you wrote it. I must say you dipped your pen in blood and this is your scarlet letter. Nice write"
Posted by nightshade on "My Dearest Love" by Deaths Apostle
- "I really like this one but the lupine line and the prowl line are a hair off. Other than that it is excellent and I enjoyed the imagery as well"
Posted by nightshade on "The Fight" by DarkBlades
- "When I first started reading this I got a very creepy feeling of deja vu. Especially the line "Now I am forced to walk this dark and gruesome world." You could have pulled this almost directly from some of my unposted works.
I however welcomed the sudden change when faith stepped out. I must say you are a writer after my own heart. (even if you seem to steal my lines :p) Keep em coming, Roxas :p (actually you might be Sora he had a bigger bit to play :p)"
Posted by nightshade on "Finding Faith" by DarkBlades
- "I used to do some welding back when I was about 15 - 18 (yes it was shop class but still welding) That experience made this poem all the more real for me.
I must say your word choices and your style really gave this poem a drive and pull of it's very own. Leaving a horrible empty feeling in the pit of my being at the end."
Posted by nightshade on "As welders cry." by Iwas
- "This had a serious collision at the end. I really enjoy poetry that makes me feel something. However the hurt and pain in this make one happy to be alive and breathing. I am also sorry for your loss."
Posted by nightshade on "Dust settles silent" by Iwas
- "Interesting choice there two separate ways to go. It's sad that so many scream yet none take the time to hear. However joining the land is always a rather tasteless option."
Posted by nightshade on "sweet suicide" by DarkBlades
- "I like the advice given in this poem but some many choose not to take it or are simply unable or to scared to do what is best for them. Nice write"
Posted by nightshade on "Abuse" by DarkBlades
- "heh now you have me wondering what your old name is while images of vampiric roses dance in my head. I really enjoyed the imagery on this one."
Posted by nightshade on "The Rose" by Frater Synth
- "Haha the innuendo was not intentional lol. However I must say that gave me a good laugh when you put it like that. One day I might catch you on and explain to you what it really is. Though there is a hint in the title :p"
Posted by nightshade on "Mighty Warrior (the calling)" by nightshade
- "Some things Draven must be brought forth out of the darkness and into the light and the alleys they call home will forever strike fear in the hearts of mankind.
As far as revisiting said alleys I personally only want to do that when I have about 10 high powered search lights and maybe an RPG and a nice large flamethrower.
I must say the response I have gotten from this one work has pleased me yet it still feels wrong to be pleased about conjuring such horrid thoughts and emotions in my reader."
Posted by nightshade on "Malignant trust " by nightshade
- "Sometimes it's hard to cut that malignancy out for it is as the word has come to suggest so deeply wound about our actual core.
Also many manage to break free of that cycle so vicious more so than the media suggest. For some it never grabs a foothold. However the media loves to focus on those few who are truly incurable.
The secret however is in three things each equally important. One is educating yourself of the facts and comprehending what is going on and how to stop it. Second is having individuals around you who support you know matter how vile you (or others) think you are. And the last thing needed is a desire to change and understanding how to avoid falling back into that cycle."
Posted by nightshade on "Malignant trust " by nightshade
- "Sometimes lust childhood is even more disturbing than adult life. It is one thing however to know that to be a fact and another to experience it.
I know there is a saying in a well publicized book something about "When I was a child I spoke as a child." and then something about putting away childish things. However what does one do when the "childish" things are more than some adults can handle? We have things ingrained in us as children some good some bad however for some we must refine those things and learn and expand our understanding.
However that being said there are also times when childhood is really as good as some say it should be. Those are what we should cherish and remember."
Posted by nightshade on "Malignant trust " by nightshade
- "you have some good imagery and I agree that this would sink its claws into the readers mind a bit more if you changed your structure a good bit. However unlike the others I think you should try it not to please the reader but to try something different even if you don't do it again.
It's all about the challenge :P
Great work and am going to read more now lol."
Posted by nightshade on "in the darkness of the night" by BrokenAngel
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