help me on a title
By Sex Slave
(my first attempt to rhyme so ya....go easy on me) ~danny~
You never saw my tears
Because you ran from my fears
Pretended like you cared
But you were scared
Stayed around for the fun
Then bad times came and you were done
I asked for light
You gave me night
When I was helpless and weak
That was your peak
Not once there catch me when I fell
You sent me to hell
I suffered the pain
And it was your gain
You seemed like a dove
I was in love
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Copyright 2005 Danielle Heyboer
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On Saturday, July 1, 2006, mywristshurt
(405) wrote:
freaky and yet so remourseful.. very nice to see you try to rhyme, and succeed.. as long as we can understand your feelings, its all good.. very good write
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On Monday, May 1, 2006, Lady Grinning Soul
(143) wrote:
this is good for being a first time rhyme. how bout You Ran Away for a title. i dont know if it is a good title but hey its a title
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On Wednesday, October 12, 2005, GreekPhilosopher
(156) wrote:
Hmmm, Well Not A Bad Attempt But It Feels A Little Forced. GPhD.
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On Thursday, May 26, 2005, Malice In Wonderland
(976) wrote:
Hm...Love lost?
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On Thursday, May 26, 2005, Saint_Reaper
(200) wrote:
first time for rhyme..... but indeed a good one, i like it... title, hmmm.... let me get back to you on a title
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A former member wrote:
ok ok I got one, how about *Chicken Bleep* and I haven't even read your poem. Yay!
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On Thursday, May 26, 2005, Serenity
(469) wrote:
Oh I like. I'm not great with titles otherwise I'd help ya >.<