Eyes To The Mirror
By BeautifulCalamity
Making love through a series of gestures,
yes..at best, making love.
By pictures and magnets,
through cellars and wind chimes..
And the space between your mind,
defragmented...defragmentation...
Bruises cover our bodies,
our eyes peer out of an endless tunnel..
we are here, we are now...
If Only..
Eyes To The Mirror,
Outstretched Pale Face...
Reaches Like A Hand,
To Some Unknown Place..
these eyes, those eyes..
(EYE KEEP COMING BACK TO THE I)
The young face...frail.
now appears captured (captive).. HELD
But from where,
HELD.
You grab me, pull me..
tell me we must pursue the chance ;
constant..
by the M O S T ..
we are motion..
swaying in whichever direction our souls push..
S.W.A.Y. S.W.A.Y...
please stay, please stay..
I dont believe a lily will ever grow from the space
where you used to lay..
(And Watch Those Stars, Those Perfect Stars..Rise)
No, no more will grow,
the land of our heart...deadened..
Our Soil.. deafened..
Numbed,
NUMBING..
Baby, You numb me.. you show me i'm not real,
that i'm a part of your center..
of your brain diverged.
emerged...perverse..
We will show eachother how much we mean,
the love pours out of my mouth , as the drip of
a cracked
glass...
offering up the smallest of the..
SUN...
Comments on "Eyes To The Mirror"
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A former member wrote:
I wish I could be in a state of mind that allows me more complex comments but I couldn't ignore the desolate atmosphere that resides into this one, the regret mixed with hope all contained into an inspired surrounding melancholy. Well done.
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A former member wrote:
nice use of assonance. there's a suggestion of internal rhyme to this (which I enjoy reading/using). sublte with a deeper meaning that leaves room for thought.
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On Wednesday, April 6, 2005, Rone4611
(121) wrote:
you never, never, never, never, never, never, never NEVER cease to amaze me! N E V E R. Will you marry me?
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A former member wrote:
Beautiful write.
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On Saturday, December 25, 2004, blue
(1409) wrote:
...I...I...am speechless. I'll come back when I have something intelligent to say. ~b
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A former member wrote:
The stutter-step pace of this kept me off balance and tuned in, this was refreshing:) ~Ryan
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A former member wrote:
I think i have been missing out. this was awesome. *hunts more of these down*
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A former member wrote:
So powerful and captivating, I love it, -J
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On Sunday, October 31, 2004, rondant
(58) wrote:
nice read, ty
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On Wednesday, October 13, 2004, Loserland
(113) wrote:
well written...powerful images
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A former member wrote:
-Stars..Rise) This captured my heart, my breath, my mind. Beautiful. ~*~ Rose ~*~
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A former member wrote:
This is most original in it's unusual and remarkable emotion. I imagine your words stringing together like a fragile rainbow of stars : "I dont believe a lily will ever grow from the space where you used to lay..
(And Watch Those Stars, Those Perfect St
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On Monday, October 4, 2004, Alacer_Cogitatus
(140) wrote:
a fresh poet, so well versed. wonderful. A_C
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A former member wrote:
Amazed,Stuned,yet i took a hold of myself to express my admiration and respect.
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A former member wrote:
Outstretched Pale Face...
Reaches Like A Hand,
To Some Unknown Place..
this is really good. keep it up! ~Sick
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On Thursday, September 30, 2004, Angst Queen
(370) wrote:
i like your style i really do. another great write
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On Wednesday, September 29, 2004, Solace
(1065) wrote:
Ok this is brilliant "at best" tearful, amazing and so breathtakingly beautiful...You and Lynaes, now thats a pair of pretties i would love to listen to for hours on end...
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A former member wrote:
Wow, just wow...you have a calming sense of intellect...and an amazing way with imagery...the graces of which you whisper...take me away from here, somehow.
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On Monday, September 20, 2004, BeautifulCalamity
(428) wrote:
Thank You Lynaes, if you come back to this, i really like your poetry .. its all very original and i love the imagery in what i've read so far :D ..
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On Thursday, September 23, 2004, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
You're very welcome.. and thank you very much. I can say the same for yours. :)
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On Sunday, September 19, 2004, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
I love this... your unique descriptions give me too many exceptional lines to quote.. I actually feel this is one of the best pieces of art I've read in quite a long time.. I highly commend you for this. Excellent work. I'll read this over and over.
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On Sunday, September 19, 2004, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
And welcome to dp. I look forward to more of your work.