vintageviolence

By slow.burn.star

don't you remember the taste
and the way the edge of day
broke over your . . .:: wrist like
some
fire ignited in your veins.
releasing bloodlust and brimstone.
cascading in crimson streaks, thick and delicate and beautiful.
forcing the s c r e a m s out of you
with my hands
clasped around your ~slender neck.
so delicate.
the black tendrils of your hair
were soaked in blood.
your

cold


skin
the color of dove wings.

red nightfall
inching over you're lips
like the shadows of lust
at sunset.

i breathed great swells of steam into the night air.
& you,
so perfect in your sleep..
weeping tears like
shattered glass against the pale of your cheek.
you dreamed for me.
as the waves licked the sand and somewhere

over the azure abyss

where the sky meets the sea..


it waits.

and i can taste the dream under your s k i n
you're so beautiful when you hurt
for me
when you're hair falls
just
that
way:::

things could never be the same. i saw you and everything inside me knew.
when you walked away. i hope you're dream is lovely. i hope its everything
you wanted it to be. i hope you never sleep.
when you're eyes fall on me
just
that
way:::

i'll kiss you're eyelids for the last time
and whisper
you
to sleep. just that way. dreamdreamdreamdream
dream dream d r e a m. . .

crushed shells lying by the shore.
never to be whole.
and i, shattered look upon the waves like little wishes
broken by the land.

you're hands are soft and wet.
and i smile at your eyelids, closed for the last time.
colors pooling in the sand. the sound. rushing.
rushing.
and i told you i would give you something special.


its cold now

but you

are calm.

f o r e ver


..::: dreaming.

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Copyright 2003 slow.burn.star
Published on Wednesday, September 10, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: just adore your words and your emotives...they slow motion my world.....beautiful and engaging. blessings~

  • A former member wrote: you have such a unique style. i should have faved you long ago. so goddamn brilliant, this is.

  • BeautifulCalamity On Sunday, October 31, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (428)By person wrote:

    beautiful.. truly, from your first words, to your last.. well done..

  • A former member wrote: You are the Queen of violent poetry...I make vast attempts at this magnificence...simply astounding.

  • BeautifulCalamity On Friday, October 1, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (428)By person wrote:

    "red nightfall inching over you're lips like the shadows of lust at sunset".. loved this, very good write, i really like your style

  • Dayer On Saturday, September 25, 2004, Dayer (162)By person wrote:

    this is perfect writing. I loved everything about this

  • Railway_Butterfly On Tuesday, June 8, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (354)By person wrote:

    ..so perfectly placed..Butterfly..xxx...

  • Railway_Butterfly On Tuesday, June 8, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (354)By person wrote:

    ...'so perfect in your sleep weeping tears like glass against the plae of your cheek you dreamed for me.as the waves licked the sand and somewhere over the azure abyss where the sky meets the sea..it waits'...wow....and I thought the ending was fantastic.

  • Railway_Butterfly On Tuesday, June 8, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (354)By person wrote:

    ...fucking hell..this is just..astounding.Completely.So...artistic..every word just seemed to pour over me and I had to read this over and over again...

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Wednesday, September 24, 2003, TropicalSnowstorm (1703)By person wrote:

    Very haunting and well done - I especially loved the lines "so perfect in your sleep.. weeping tears like shattered glass against the pale of your cheek. you dreamed for me. as the waves licked the sand and somewhere". Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • Chameleon On Friday, September 12, 2003, Chameleon (111)By person wrote:

    oh my god...SPOOKY! I can't beleive it! Everyone went changing their names and its taken me this long to find everyone again. Love this, as always- your back on my favs; rightfully so.

  • manywalks On Thursday, September 11, 2003, manywalks (750)By person wrote:

    Intense, this just jammed its way into my mind and refused to budge, excellent. ~ mw

  • Nightmare On Wednesday, September 10, 2003, Nightmare (24)By person wrote:

    Wow.. I am astonished by this write, I love it. - Lee ^_^

  • Six-Out On Wednesday, September 10, 2003, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Well, la de fucking da! Star girl, this is one maglificant piece. You make me twiddle in my jimmies. Super duper cool write.

  • slow.burn.star On Wednesday, September 10, 2003, slow.burn.star (84)By person wrote:

    aww -love-

  • maddin foxxxy On Wednesday, September 10, 2003, maddin foxxxy (358)By person wrote:

    Absolutely stunning....made feel, smell, see and hear your words...I am speechless, You've done a great job, needless to say-

  • Demosthenes On Wednesday, September 10, 2003, Demosthenes (155)By person wrote:

    well. youre still a god. -B

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