running dog

By Jonas

i would draw pictures in the sand
to know that art is ethereal

if i were on a beach

the sun blinks
rapidly
(epilepsy)
through the trunks of the oak
trees
and disappears behind hills

i would climb one of these fresh green hills to
find a flower for you

if it didn't make my eyes itch like a son of a bitch

this passes slowly
effortlessly
sitting in these tin
innards
my mind running over the hills

i scowl at the back of the bus seat
like it'll make a difference

but it doesn't

and the land levels
and cows turn grass into shit
and live to die

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Copyright 2004 Fish
Published on Monday, April 5, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • aXe FactoR On Monday, May 24, 2004, aXe FactoR (333)By person wrote:

    i'm full of awe after reading this. i'm at a lost for comments, cos you write too well. lol. :)

  • sulkylime On Monday, April 19, 2004, sulkylime (191)By person wrote:

    i really like how the world filters through you.. i wonder how much you are like your poetry

  • KittyStryker On Sunday, May 2, 2004, KittyStryker (710)By person wrote:

    a lot. totally and completely... his body being is the channeling of poetry into tissue, skin, and bones. it reflects in his eyes. :)

  • flying_fox On Tuesday, April 6, 2004, flying_fox (571)By person wrote:

    the juxtaposition of "i would climb one of these fresh green hills to find a flower for you" and "if it didn't make my eyes itch like a son of a bitch" knocked me over. great stuff. Fox

  • KittyStryker On Tuesday, April 6, 2004, KittyStryker (710)By person wrote:

    awww.... my grumpy boy. :) ::huggles::

  • Mistress Morbid On Monday, April 5, 2004, Mistress Morbid (405)By person wrote:

    Your work is definitly something else. This was good. -Morb

  • Alanarchy On Monday, April 5, 2004, Alanarchy (1168)By person wrote:

    Great work. I would highlight my favorite line, but then I would just end up quoteing the whole damn thing. Nice work, brother.

  • A former member wrote: your style is so here and clear. you make no apologies for authenticity in a world that worships lies, and for that you have my respect. your edge is water to a mirage. inspiring.

  • purr_verse On Monday, April 5, 2004, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    wonderful opening couplet especially... as usual, true quality from your pen; truly great stuff.

  • Six-Out On Monday, April 5, 2004, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    *bows* You, my friend, are one badass fag.

  • girlafraid On Monday, April 5, 2004, girlafraid (479)By person wrote:

    i scowl at the back of the bus seat like it'll make a difference-i love the mood this line captures...thanks for sharing

  • manywalks On Monday, April 5, 2004, manywalks (747)By person wrote:

    Ah, and so I sit back to let this digest me, and spew me out when its done. ~ mw

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