Ghost In The Rain
By darkness_descends
Driving alone on a deserted road at night
All is dark save for the illumination of my head lights
When suddenly I slam on the breaks
To not hit a girl who now stands in my way
Standing there expressionless
Outlined by an eery luminescence
Rain pours down and somehow she's not wet
And I notice she's almost translucent
I see this and wonder how can it be
So I step out to calm my curiosity
There she stands about five and a half feet
Silken black hair flowing free
Down to her waist
Partially obscuring her pale sullen face
Skin so pale it almost glows in the moonless night
Wearing a lace gown snow white
Spotted with crimson bloody stains
Her otherwise empty eyes radiating pain
As I take a step closer and open my mouth to speak
She too steps forward and walks right through me
Filling me with sadness and dread
Standing frozen while she invades my head
My eyes behold a horrific scene
And a violent tale unfolds before me
The sky is dark and the moon is bright
And the girl is walking home from a school dance this fall night
Passing by a cemetery shrouded in shadows
When out jumps a man she doesn't even know
A knife in his hand ans she starts to run
Terrified and only fifteen years young
A hand grabs her from behind
She is bound and gagged, eyes covered blind
Beaten, bruised, scarred, and brutally raped
Through muffled cries her innocence is violated and desecrated
Behind blackened eyes and swollen lips
From which blood slowly drips
She pleads for mercy
She begs and screams
This monster unties her restreaints and lets her see
In this moment he sets her free
Running and crying she thought she'd seen the end
Then out of nowhere he attacks again
He slashes her throat
And beats her skull on a headstone
Stabbing her again and again
His horrible face is the last thing she sees before the end
Now that her life and pain have finally ceased
She's raped again adding insult to injury
The monster is done and he leaves
Leaving her under a gravestone where she still bleeds
There she was left battered and dead
Then suddenly she leaves my head
She vanishes as a tear rolls down her face
Leving me saddened, shocked, and dismayed
As I am left standing there
I've never been deeper in despair
Back in my car still feeling her pain
Lost in confusion with nothing to do but drive away.
Comments on "Ghost In The Rain"
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On Wednesday, January 13, 2010, maggot death
(60) wrote:
Good job. This is kind of a short story and a poem, to me. I like how this poem had a certain storyline to it. I could feel the pain through the screen. Nice write
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On Thursday, October 6, 2005, a_deception_unto_myself
(15) wrote:
Love the imagery.Really lets you visualize the colors of making you speechless.great write.
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A former member wrote:
woah
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On Wednesday, January 14, 2004, Anybody_Killette
(47) wrote:
*speechless*
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On Friday, November 7, 2003, Delilah
(113) wrote:
Imagery, Karl....great imagery...~Delilah~
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On Thursday, November 6, 2003, DarkDruidess
(313) wrote:
this is wonderful narrative that I saddly enjoyed.
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A former member wrote:
and the "finalization," or what have you, was a last wrenching jerk of said dagger as it withdrew itself from my heart... extremely well done.
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A former member wrote:
oh...wow.... i wouldn't say brilliant, but i can't really think of any other words at this moment. this was like a dagger planted firmly in my chest, burying itself deeper as the story progressed....
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A former member wrote:
Well...I'm officially speechless. That was...amazing. The imagery was unreal. This is truly a great work!
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A former member wrote:
honestly, when i 1st see how long this poem this, i said oh! maybe i will not read it, but when i read it, i said thanks god, how stupid i would be if i didnt read it. Excellent Work!!!!!! Touching ..Deep...Perfect!
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A former member wrote:
The imagery in the poem is so vivid and real..I felt as though I could see the girl myself..very beautiful work