Imagining the Sky
By Intoxicating Delirium
I sit quietly
And watch him pass by
Never skips a day
Without a tear in his eye
Such a beautiful face
Doesn't deserve to cry
Inside he screams
I just want to die
He never says hello
But passes right on by
As if I couldn't hear his thoughts
He holds his head up high
He lays down on the grass
A couple feet nearby
A little bit of pain
Let out by a sigh
I wish that I could comfort him
When he whispers why
But I lay here still
Unable to reply
You see, My skin is decomposing
My eyes a bit awry
My jaw sewn shut from speaking
My tongue a bit to dry
A smile plastered on my face
My grimace is denied
Rigor Mortis long set in
My movements won't comply
When he rises from the grass
And walks away I try
With every bit of will
I have pent up inside
To pull him back and tell him
We need to say goodbye
But I'm frozen in the dark
This death I can't defy
I've always believed
I'd go to heaven when I die
But I lie here in a box
Imagining the sky
Author's Note:
The beginning is a little cheesy, hopefully the ending makes up for it :)Comments on "Imagining the Sky"
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On Monday, March 16, 2020, Kirschmond
(15) wrote:
Wow! This is just dark and beautiful.. it touched something deep inside of me.. ;)
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On Monday, April 17, 2017, Scarrzz
(235) wrote:
That was outstanding. I understood the perspective quite soon, but the emotion was still compelling. Sometimes things cannot be fixed. I hope the sun shines on you today.
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On Friday, September 11, 2015, darkheartmagic
(81) wrote:
Another great write by you.....I tell my kids the same thing in which you just said in a comment to me.....I have a teenage boy and a 18 month old little girl. I want nothing more than them to not go threw what I have and still going threw. For the past two years I've been afraid to post anything new because as you should no every great story ends with a grave. Your poems are real raw and truthfull . that makes you a better writer than most. Keep true. Stories are only stories if the teller fantasies about there next word, remember that girl. Your poems will reach out and touch another if only you want it to.
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On Saturday, March 7, 2015, Ortolan
(214) wrote:
You are a great writer.The same thing has happened to me, I was the guy who was concerned for a girl though and I couldn't move.I can relate to that type of desperation.10/10
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On Friday, December 12, 2014, heinzlet
(25) wrote:
After reading some of your poems I can tell that you're really talented, seriously, I like your style.
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A former member wrote:
Oh.. That's so beautiful and sad! I almost had tears on my eyes... Great piece! :)
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A former member wrote:
Such a beautiful and sad poem.. Even I have tears in my eyes! :)
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On Monday, May 5, 2014, heroineyes
(111) wrote:
the last stanza reminds me of a seen in dreyers vampyr where he's in a casket and you are looking out through a glass window from the protagonist's point of view
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On Tuesday, April 29, 2014, TheAmazingCagedOne
(20) wrote:
I literally thought you were alive and observing another person. But this is truly amazing writing! Shocker at the end! I really hope that doesn't happen though.. I'm a wee bit claustrophobic (:
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On Tuesday, April 22, 2014, Intoxicating Delirium
(273) wrote:
Thank you everyone!!!
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A former member wrote:
very good write, the emotion was very strong, at first i thought the character was alive, didn't expect the ending at all-Mrk
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On Wednesday, April 16, 2014, haunted
(837) wrote:
oh yeah, im loving this, it is kind of on the morbid side and that's always a plus in my book. this flowed very well the rhyming is perfect and the story line is awesome. I to imagined a park and not a cemetery. and even then you never reveal a graveyard which leaves it open for interpretation. I think your on to something Caitlin, keep writing in this style because I loved the twist and I loved the suspense and I also loved that until the end the impact was not what could be predicted. that's great writing. awesome!
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On Wednesday, April 16, 2014, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
Very nice miss Caitlin, you had me thinking you were in a park until the secret was revealed. The next to last stanza got to me, so sad not getting to say goodbye. I enjoyed reading this one, the layout was great. Awesome write................... ~ACE~
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On Wednesday, April 16, 2014, Commander_Cadaver
(233) wrote:
That was some ending. Not expecting it at all. Very different and from an interesting point of view. A great write.