disorderly- asylum door #1

By anathema

mel*an*cho*lia

(noun)

: a mental condition characterized by extreme depression, bodily complaints, and often hallucinations and delusions; esp : MANIC-DEPRESSIVE PSYCHOSIS

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* u *
* p *
* ! * *
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and things move quickly
oh so quickly
and i'm sickly
with how quickly
things are moving
things are proving
themselves wrong
inside
my head
and yet i question
yes i question
my obsession
with this question
and i'm asking
multitasking
there's this song
inside
my head

~d~

~o~

~w~

~n~

|
|
V

there's this
void
i am a
void
i am
a
little
bit
annoyed
or i would be
and i could be
but there's
nothing
in
my
head

just
depression
no
obsession
and i
have
a small
confession
and i'd tell you
and
compel you
but
i
think
that
i
am
dead
...

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Published on Tuesday, July 8, 2003. Filed under: "Poetry"

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Comments on "disorderly- asylum door #1"

On Thursday, March 25, 2010, Miztaken4beauty (176) wrote:

I adore the scheme, shape, and meaning here. Brilliant.
A former member wrote: hehe, i was so amazed, the grammar in my comment makes me look like an idiot, lmao...
A former member wrote: oh my god. i'm sure you have heard it before, but this is me. the very perfect description of bipolar i have ever seen. very great, awsome, wonderful, amazing poem!
A former member wrote: This is awesome! It makes for a great read. Marvelous write!
On Saturday, August 20, 2005, Last1inLine (14) wrote:

Incredible write. I just stumbled upon this today and I love it. Did I mention that I am currently within the walls of an institution?
On Sunday, November 21, 2004, Lotophagi (333) wrote:

this is just absolutely brilliant..... superb construction visually, and lyrically..... excellent write. Thank you.
A former member wrote: I just spent the last hour reading bad/marginal poems. Thankyou for writing this.
A former member wrote: Wow this is dragging me 90 MPH.
On Monday, May 17, 2004, aXe FactoR (333) wrote:

wow...kudos to the way u structure this poem. really awesome! :)
On Sunday, April 11, 2004, Cinn (152) wrote:

wow i dont know what else i can say that hasn't already been said but that's a damn good write
On Wednesday, March 10, 2004, flying_fox (571) wrote:

amazing write...the words, so short and staccatoed just grab the eye and drag it down the page. Fabulous. Am off to read the rest of the series! Fox
A former member wrote: I really like this because it totally caught me off gaurd. I wasn't ready for something like that. Great.
On Tuesday, September 16, 2003, SilentStalker (1047) wrote:

...impressive. I was caught off-guard and just spun around with this.
On Tuesday, August 19, 2003, _Andrew_ (245) wrote:

crazy, i enjoyed ever bit, im like in a total state of awe right now... i've never seen such a style and just... *~*aNDReW*~*
On Tuesday, August 5, 2003, Demosthenes (155) wrote:

and i thought i could write.... *favoritizes it* -B
On Saturday, August 16, 2003, Demosthenes (155) wrote:

*favoritizes you too* favoritizes is such a word. -B
On Thursday, July 10, 2003, Stranger (263) wrote:

The way that you splash words on a page with such freedom while simultaneously being completely reined in, like harnessing a comet or a storm is simply awesome.
On Wednesday, July 9, 2003, Jonas (715) wrote:

...................... mind blowing
On Wednesday, July 9, 2003, Six-Out (1423) wrote:

You know, so many newbies come and go, but I hope this one stays. This was a remarkable piece. I am literally here kicking myself because I can't write like that. Heh, great job.
A former member wrote: also adding fo my favorites. this reminds me somehow of some of Poe's works.
A former member wrote: you make amazing poetry. thats all.
A former member wrote: *sigh* I think I can write and then I meet people like you. You should read some of Kittygrrl's stuff.
On Tuesday, July 8, 2003, anathema (50) wrote:

this is meant to be a poem that expresses manic depression... it's first in a series of doors that make up the maze of my diagnoses.
On Tuesday, July 8, 2003, Seraphic (209) wrote:

I am in awe...I have not read anything like this, ever and...I'm in awe :) This is an amazing poem...adding it to my favorites ~*cherry*~