Warrior's Redemption
By HeadpatSlut
Warrior’s Redemption
Let the Rain come down and wash away-
All the things I’ve done today-
The Blood I’ve spilled, that’s on my hands-
This fresh hot proof that I am damned-
My final foe to rest be laid-
Impaled by my wicked blade-
Under these blackened skies I stare-
Into my heart, there’s nothing there-
My foe drops and falls to the floor-
This man will breathe again, no more-
Now nothing more is left to see-
Because my blade was thrust in me.
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Copyright 2011 DK6_Marius
Published on Monday, October 31, 2011.
Filed under: "Structured" and
"Poetry"
Author's Note:
A quickly done, short write.Comments on "Warrior's Redemption"
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On Monday, October 31, 2011, dwells
(4177) wrote:
DK6 - humbly suggest a tweak to the last line if I understand the thrust (no pun intended) "Because my blade has turned on me" - that is to assume that this is seppuku / suicide. Just an idea from a backset driver. Overall this was reminiscent of the heroic style of old and thanks for the tale sir.
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On Monday, October 31, 2011, The Guardian Angel
(28) wrote:
Even though this was done in a short time it is a good poem. How a warrior redeems himself through his own blade. Good write