Warrior's Redemption

By HeadpatSlut

Warrior’s Redemption

 

Let the Rain come down and wash away-

All the things I’ve done today-

The Blood I’ve spilled, that’s on my hands-

This fresh hot proof that I am damned-

My final foe to rest be laid-

Impaled by my wicked blade-

Under these blackened skies I stare-

Into my heart, there’s nothing there-

My foe drops and falls to the floor-

This man will breathe again, no more-

Now nothing more is left to see-

Because my blade was thrust in me.


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Copyright 2011 DK6_Marius
Published on Monday, October 31, 2011.     Filed under: "Structured" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

A quickly done, short write.
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  • dwells On Monday, October 31, 2011, dwells (4285)By person wrote:

    DK6 - humbly suggest a tweak to the last line if I understand the thrust (no pun intended) "Because my blade has turned on me" - that is to assume that this is seppuku / suicide. Just an idea from a backset driver. Overall this was reminiscent of the heroic style of old and thanks for the tale sir.

  • The Guardian Angel On Monday, October 31, 2011, The Guardian Angel (28)By person wrote:

    Even though this was done in a short time it is a good poem. How a warrior redeems himself through his own blade. Good write

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