Insignificant One
By Rowan
Frustrated anger ruining my carved face,
want for a new beginning
surrendered.
Suffering in my disillusioned place,
my final stand
against you rendered.
Power free in ranks of forged steel,
a mold rarely broken by majority vote.
Complain of uneven spokes
in the wheel,
when we created the bumps in the road.
Flags
pinned on deceptive black suits,
voids in truths from honored voices.
Virtuous souls centuries mute,
cornered and enslaved by our own
choices.
Limit my speech to but an hour past,
others next
with the same mindless chatter.
Speed steadily through concerns amassed,
the likes of which show to you no matter.
Destroy my hope
for a future in just,
murder my will and force me still.
Insignificant
one silenced with mistrust,
my--our freedom you have killed.
Author's Note:
I think I'll change this later on. Something is off.Comments on "Insignificant One"
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On Saturday, October 15, 2011, Ortolan
(214) wrote:
Why change it, I see this ill phenomena at work in our life,on our world every day, and you illustrated it quite well.
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A former member wrote:
This has such a beautiful rhythm. Every line transmutes such a significant emotion. I enjoyed this in particular, "Virtuous souls centuries mute, cornered and enslaved by our own choices." That was incredible.
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On Tuesday, May 11, 2010, Miztaken4beauty
(176) wrote:
Destroy my hope for a future in just, murder my will and force me still. Insignificant one silenced with mistrust, my--our freedom you have killed. This is blatant and in your face. cool.
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A former member wrote:
All of your work is powerful and emotional. Well done
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A former member wrote:
wow. very in your face. "Flags pinned on deceptive black suits" i got a great image out of this
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On Friday, May 7, 2010, lupus tenebrae
(860) wrote:
Intense write Rowan, I don't see why you would change it, it's perfect the way it is. Insignificance would be a cause for such frustration, I really enjoyed this, thanks.
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On Friday, May 7, 2010, Rowan
(197) wrote:
Well then since everyone enjoys it, I guess I won't be changing it. :)
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On Friday, May 7, 2010, HeadpatSlut
(257) wrote:
This is by far one of the best poems I've ever read on here, I felt the pure rage in almost every line and every word hit hard and spot on target, I couldn't stop reading, such a heart-pounding race that it was addicting, thanks for the amazing write Rowan.