Barren in the Womb

By A Velvet Tongue

Alone...I Float...

...Barren....

In The Womb

I am...

Limbless..
Voiceless...

I Am..

At the mercy of your will..

Can you even feel me?

I am

A Single Cell..

With a Soul..

Sightless...Primitive.....Dependent

Vulnerable......Invalid.....

Striving

Towards...

- One-

Thing.........

~......Breath.....~

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Published on Sunday, July 6, 2003. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "Barren in the Womb"

On Sunday, October 7, 2007, carlosjackal (3015) wrote:

The communication of the egg in the womb, if it could be put into words..So much spoken here, brilliant. -Carl
On Sunday, July 17, 2005, Sticky Kitty (242) wrote:

lovely indeed. -kitty
On Monday, November 15, 2004, Savannah (218) wrote:

awesome.. nuff said
On Monday, October 13, 2003, Silver Spectre (90) wrote:

and brings to mind the argument of when life begins.Invalid yet striving to breathe.~Silver~
On Sunday, August 10, 2003, The Fallen Angel (235) wrote:

I like reading your works...the spaces add a new dimension for emotion
On Thursday, August 7, 2003, Blood of Winter (296) wrote:

An interesting take on conception, I like it, it is humbling when you think we all start out like that.
A former member wrote: This reminds me of when I was a child and I wanted to somehow "re-create" the feeling in the womb. I would empty my lungs so I could sink deeper into the pool and then I would close my eyes and curl into a ball.
On Monday, July 7, 2003, manywalks (750) wrote:

Quiet and reflective, left me with the feeling of a burgeoning sense chaos. ~ mw
A former member wrote: Then I was born! Blahhhhh! Boo!
On Sunday, July 6, 2003, pessum ire animus (57) wrote:

perplexed.... somehow... this was...is...wonderful....
On Sunday, July 6, 2003, A Velvet Tongue (436) wrote:

Thanks for your comment. I was actually speaking of the mere moments, just after conception, the cell, that has no idea what it is, or will become..yet somehow it just knows it must do..Yes, I know I'm...odd.grinz*
On Sunday, July 6, 2003, Midnight Phoenix (240) wrote:

The clarity of this piece offered me much room to think of the details unsaid. The brief conclusion still managed to hold important the meaning of the poem. I look forward to seeing more of your work.
On Sunday, July 6, 2003, A Velvet Tongue (436) wrote:

I actually left so many spaces so the reader could reflect on the unspoken, Im glad you picked it up easily. Thank you for your encouragement.
A former member wrote: in an attempt to leave a deeper comment. it was purposely choppy whch left me with a very psychotic feeling. great job. i plan on reading more
On Sunday, July 6, 2003, Demosthenes (155) wrote:

man. dude. cool. -B