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To The Gallows
By HeadpatSlut
To The Gallows
A solitary structure stands atop
an empty hill-
And when within one's eyesight, Time itself is still-
Worm-eaten bodies all around, a sight to make some ill.
An
old forbidden curse upon this place was cast-
Death comes eager, and
befalls the victims fast.
Phantoms linger where mortals have passed-
Taken away is the chance they had to live-
Depleted is everything
there ever was to give-
Some would prefer a suicide, in fact, that
seems seductive.
To the Gallows bound and gagged, I stumble,
and am led-
I will die to help ensure that Death is full and fed-
By the time you read this poem, know that I am dead.
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Copyright 2010 DK6_Marius
Author's Note:
For the first time in a very long while, I find myself experimenting with different Rhyme Schemes and Structures, this poem is the result of one such experiment.Comments on "To The Gallows"
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A former member wrote:
Absolutely love your experiment. This is golden.
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A former member wrote:
Your experiment was successful - I would have never pulled off four triplets with such effortless grace. Normally, when one is trying to keep to form, content and expression are compromised, but here I can find no artificialities. I love the alliteration in the first line - "solitary structure stands" - the "s"-sound has always possessed a malicious quality to my ears. And in the end, we discover that we have been reading a death note - talk about saving the best for last!
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On Thursday, August 5, 2010, lupus tenebrae
(872)
wrote:
The long agonizing trudge to that looming wooden structure is bad enough, but the actual moments before that rope strangles all the life out of you, chilling, wicked piece.
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A former member wrote:
Wow, man. If this what you call a first attempt, I think you have a very bright future ahead of you in the realm of poetry and writing in general. Seriously, this reads effortlessly to me. I am not a professional critic, by any strectch of the imagination, but even so this is top notch. The meter was smooth and balanced as well. Graet job. --Draven. (BTW, you should enroll in DP college next semester.)
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A former member wrote:
very nice. i liked the imagery. you painted that image with a skilled hand
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On Sunday, August 1, 2010, Bulvine
(30) wrote:
Very dark and mood setting. You have quite a range.
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A former member wrote:
it was amazing i loved it.. great write!
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