my first poem

All of us live within a dream
Afraid to wake, afraid to be
And no one knows when death is near;
Still we sleep, and still we fear...

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Published on Monday, April 13, 2009. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "my first poem"

A former member wrote: truth wrapped up tightly in four concise lines...wonderful :)
On Tuesday, April 14, 2009, carlosjackal (3018) wrote:

Excellent first poem. What a start :)
On Tuesday, April 14, 2009, Lady Grinning Soul (145) wrote:

well, for being a first poem, it was well captured. its amazing what one can say in 4 lines. welcome to dp
On Tuesday, April 14, 2009, Leith Plunkett (239) wrote:

Some of the best poems I have read have been no more than 4 lines. First poem or not I like the depth and thought left for me to contemplate. Well captured
On Monday, April 13, 2009, ebonyamore (101) wrote:

kinda says it all in just a few short lines, doesn't it? well written. welcome to dp :)
On Monday, April 13, 2009, blue (1454) wrote:

This made me smile; it reminds me of my own first poem, which was also four lines. Alas, for the most part, you seem to be correct in your observation. ~b