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reality take me
By whisperer
welcome world of all to the stage set ablaze with rows and rows of nobody
know where's the road you chose
it just goes and goes reach for the stars while the current of sky slowy
flows by and beyond the response to "i wonder why" and "let me die" oblivion
ours to walk and fly
run by the bullet squeeze desperation think back cock it and pull it too
the bullets fill me
fill it kill it squeeze it till it's empty don't tempt me test me let me
break it down and rebuild it gently such is the mind
hung over
rotting and weary
no more dreams
reality take me
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© 2006 whisperer
Published on Saturday, June 24, 2006.
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A former member wrote:
this has a very live hard, live now philosophy to it and is written perfectly to accent that. nice. ....-samone
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On Tuesday, June 27, 2006, TaintedButterfly
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wrote:
Parts of this remind me of that Fall Out Boy tune. Awesome take on something so fragile yet unbreakable, our dreams. Julia~
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A former member wrote:
you know, i really like this. i don't comment much on you, not as much as i should, mostly because i can't describe how i feel after i read your words. it's like..empty almost, yet full. your mind just seems..electically charged from what i read.
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On Sunday, June 25, 2006, Alanarchy
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"Oblivion ours to walk and fly" Great write. Your prose really does have a sweet flow, like june said. I enjoyed.
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A former member wrote:
Exceptional flow, as always. I think, sometimes, I would like to hop inside your brain to see if your thoughts flow so freely as your pen seems to.. the "current of sky" stanza held me, especially captivated.
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A former member wrote:
You are something to behold.. and I said it before.. to watch evolve..writes like this..they make me sad for you..but determined, all the same..because..I know sometimes you can't see it, but I can? I dunno. I'm rambling. You're amazing.
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