Thirteen Views of the Cigarette
By manunkind
1.
two graceful fingers
expertly cradle
the cigarette;
manicured, red nails
flash through the haze
2.
curdled smoke pours from its
vile like haunted milk
3.
the girl watches as
her heartbroken mother
shakily sucks the smoke into
her lungs
4.
wispy, mellow ecstasy flows and pours
soothing the mind,
casting a pallor
over the severity of life
5.
the mist hung about the town
like cigarette smoke
clinging to a smoker's deathbed
6.
the package that he offers you is
larger than a cigarette pack
but smaller than a breadbox,
it is clearly not the diamond ring you
are hopping for.
7.
a grungy black boot stomps
in a volatile manner,
extinguishing a
lingering glow
8.
angry fingers snatch
from between my lips,
this eternal craving.
a disappointed question
flickers in the eye of
my best friend.
9.
i am ashamed
of my poison
infused innards,
though i deny it.
cancerous and rotting
between your lips, i seep
into your lungs and may
never be ejected.
10.
hacking, coughing
and glaring
as they pass,
"those smokers!
uneducated fools,
how dare they!"
11.
black ringed eyes gaze
skywards
as smoke creeps out of bruised lips
and slithers towards
the stars
12.
a handsome youth
clutches a billiard queue
in four fingers, and his cigarette
with the fifth
he looks up, sees me watching,
and winks.
13.
a cigarette is to death
as a cradle is to life
Comments on "Thirteen Views of the Cigarette"
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A former member wrote:
"the mist hung about the town like cigarette smoke" Stunning line/allusion; perfect for the poem. "vile like haunted milk" A fantastic metaphor. (I think you meant hoping, not hopping in #6? Unless it's something a little more clever than I saw;i suppose
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A former member wrote:
...it could work). "cancerous and rotting" Perfect! I liked the format a lot. Gibson wrote something called: "Thirteen Views of a Cardboard City", similar style but fictional prose, not poetry, & definately a different tale. I would've liked to have seen
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A former member wrote:
...seven more views: the full pack, if you will, but I felt this poem on many levels; it cut deep into my own used lungs: Verse 3 was powerful. The Views are black, white & bruised eternal. It's a marvelous piece; well done!
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On Tuesday, June 27, 2006, Dei
(663) wrote:
god i loved this. . . its flowed so well. and those last lines really captured the whole of it so well.
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On Tuesday, February 21, 2006, Solace
(1065) wrote:
Never do you cease to amaze me with your delicate words so poignantly phrased...a tightly projected piece that augments its theme with brilliant eloquence and forethought...
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On Monday, February 20, 2006, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
Left me bedazzled and ever glad I quit. Thanks for this.
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A former member wrote:
love it!!!oh fuck i love it!
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A former member wrote:
ali... i fucking love this, this is amazing. coincidence you lebelled it number twelve? i think not! haha. but seriously, this is incredible. im favoritizing it. youre an amazing writer.
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On Friday, September 23, 2005, Sin
(1135) wrote:
i am never disappointed when i read one of your writes, they are always refreshing and unique, #7 was my favorite ~kristy
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On Friday, September 23, 2005, Possesion
(136) wrote:
this was....great.
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On Friday, September 23, 2005, MESUN
(230) wrote:
excellent. simply excellent.
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On Thursday, September 22, 2005, Drea
(1388) wrote:
June sent me the link to read this, and I'm so glad she did. This was wonderful. This was written so well.
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A former member wrote:
..marvelous.