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descent of solar curtain and the rise of the second act
By Jonas
across
just under a whisper languidly wandering
saying just take tommorrow and shove it
sweep the dust under the rug
come and play with me before the rain comes
and we'll pretend that we never knew what winter was
and this'll be it
today it's you
the leaves'll fall
today it's you
my eyes catch yours
and i know i'll never say never
...so i used the websters dictionary definition... then got a little creative
with it. both stanzas employ a different pattern to spell autumn. so, the
first is: 1st word, 2nd word, 3rd etc... the second is alternating first
word/last word... and as you see, i used word 'you' instead of 'U's'...
i'm either a poet or a cheater... or maybe the definitions overlap... anyway,
my explaination is longer than my poem... so on that note i'll leave you
with this sentence that has no bearing on anything: i like pudding.
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Copyright 2005 Jonas
Published on Friday, September 9, 2005.
Filed under: "Reflective" and
"Poetry"
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On Monday, September 12, 2005, urbanhumility
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wrote:
the poet often has Autumn at the core of his/her heart......well done my friend.....fish pudding is the best........urban
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On Monday, September 12, 2005, GoldenLotus
(47) wrote:
i like pudding too, but i like this small slice of work better. what a great piece..."today it's you" oh, and how we so know who we are,today, but it is the unknown of tomorrow that brings the rain...GP
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On Monday, September 12, 2005, KittyStryker
(710) wrote:
lovely poetry, indeed. i've missed reading you.
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A former member wrote:
"just under a whisper..." this poem has a beautiful feel & flow... great title! (i like vanilla pudding, which means i like pudding, i suppose; whether vanilla or just pudding...its the pudding what counts. vanilla sounds like valhalla(sorta); it snows...
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On Friday, September 9, 2005, capt_funguy
(777) wrote:
dug dismantling this one .. nice too that the work stands on it's own .. cool stuff .. funguy
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On Friday, September 9, 2005, abattoir
(115) wrote:
I get it.cause in the end all you can do is live for the good and the bad is enevitable.winter will always come.I think?this ones worth it all again?
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A former member wrote:
well i dont understand this..but it sounds good.
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