today i took a walk...
By Sin
i took a walk today
just to clear my clouded mind
to get away
from the harsh lights
that burned my eyes
to find a moments peace
amid the chaos of turbulent thoughts
but my troubles followed me
so i walked
as fast and as far
as my feeble legs could carry me
till the light
was no more than a glimmer
a memory
and there i stood
on legs that shook
staring into the dark
into the blissful nothingness
or maybe
the vastness of everything
and i stood
until my legs could no longer hold me
and my voice was hoarse
from screaming dreams into the wind
with only the trees
to bare witness to my pain
and i thought
if i stayed here would time heal my wounds?
give me some semblance of whole
or just forget that i ever was?
so i sat there
till time trickled by
not by hours or minutes
but by each passing leaf
and i sat there still
as my ghosts taunted me with memories
and i swear the trees wept with me
till we were nothing more than dust
and the wind carried me away
with all my dead and dying dreams
Comments on "today i took a walk..."
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A former member wrote:
All I can say is WOW... Amazing....
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A former member wrote:
hmm, coulda swarn this walk is one im familiar with. very vivid
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On Saturday, February 3, 2007, jack paper
(126) wrote:
oh so lonely, i took this walk once.. down by the ocean on a moonless night..
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A former member wrote:
simply beautiful
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On Sunday, April 9, 2006, Drea
(1443) wrote:
Yeah. This is going on my faves list. This broke my heart. I've done this...felt something like this. So much respect.
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On Tuesday, April 12, 2005, Silent Assassin
(108) wrote:
I taken that walk many times. Very painful as this really showed the pain just jumping out of this. I don't think I have ever seen you written a bad poem. -Dan
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On Friday, April 8, 2005, darkleprechaun
(56) wrote:
that was fuckin awesome!!! i do that from time to time myself... i think everyone should. dave
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On Wednesday, April 6, 2005, maddog
(28) wrote:
Holy shit this was intense. I enjoyed the whole 9- many feelings buried deep that haunt me daily! Thanks I enjoyed this.
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On Monday, April 4, 2005, Lynaes
(859) wrote:
God, I felt this so deeply.. especially the first verse. that desperation for escapism, a retreat.. but you know fundamentally it won't solve anything..
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On Monday, April 4, 2005, Lynaes
(859) wrote:
I always find that I can relate to your works in an extremely comforting way.. thank you. this is wonderfully vivid for the heart.
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On Monday, April 4, 2005, island warrior
(210) wrote:
I can really feel the pain you project in this. Heartfelt write.
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On Monday, April 4, 2005, urbanhumility
(1175) wrote:
your words have given so much here.......well done..........urban
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A former member wrote:
you illuminate
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A former member wrote:
Oh, Kristy. You hold my hear in your hands. This was almost as beautiful as you. It intensified my sadness... You're beautiful.