flawed metamorphosis

By Liz

the condom I left in the trashcan
[to punish myself]
was an elephant by this morning
and it stepped on my face

afterwards
[nose bleeding and teeth chattering]
I crept into glorious sunlight
as butterflies exit a dank cocoon

self-loathing and mind-numbing apathy
[old familiar friends]
escorted my shaky passage
through the pastel breeze of spring

like a forgotten war veteran
[shell-shocked and shamed]
I marveled at misery
and longed for the past

in flawed metamorphosis
[flawed logic, flawed lust]
I lost my means of flight
when they tore as I escaped

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Published on Tuesday, March 22, 2005. Filed under: "Poetry"

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August 21st, 2013

Comments on "flawed metamorphosis"

On Wednesday, August 21, 2013, FadedBlues (2096) wrote:

...shattering fisfuls of sorrow in your poem. to imagine anyone, any human, fragile as a butterfly, emerging from the cocoon, so disabled...
On Wednesday, August 21, 2013, TropicalSnowstorm (1580) wrote:

"the condom I left in the trashcan [to punish myself]" - fantastic beginning to an excellent piece on self-loathing behavior. Loved the flow and imagery throughout! Ciao, T/S
A former member wrote: a good way to spend the minute or two it took to read this, Very nicely done.
A former member wrote: The first stanza cracks me up... it's so matter of fact. the elephant... stepped on my face. and from there into the glorious sunlight. good job liz.
A former member wrote: Funny we seem to die after we feel we've lived the most
A former member wrote: this poem for some reason reminds me of the book Rules of Attraction.....it relates a very real image, though I'm sure it's not the one your trying to convey, it speaks to me of my late adolescence...when I made meny meny mistakes, mistakes that I am jus
A former member wrote: just starting to learn from now
On Sunday, March 27, 2005, birdwell (138) wrote:

this is the best poem i've read in weeks ~db~
On Tuesday, January 8, 2008, Liz (265) wrote:

this is still one of the best comments i've ever gotten
On Thursday, March 24, 2005, Solace (1065) wrote:

*I marveled at misery and longed for the past* Gods, the expression in this is flawless, a truly awe inspiring piece...brilliant indeed
On Tuesday, March 22, 2005, sIo (898) wrote:

damn....just damn.
On Tuesday, March 22, 2005, Anth (1126) wrote:

the first verse just reminded me of that rolo advert, lol, sorry:P ill read the poem now
On Tuesday, March 22, 2005, Liz (265) wrote:

I don't think I've seen that one ;-)
On Tuesday, March 22, 2005, Anth (1126) wrote:

he teases an elephant with his last rolo i think as a kid and then years later the elephant whacks himover the head or sumfin like that...id give you my last rolo liz:D
On Tuesday, March 22, 2005, Liz (265) wrote:

Thank you anth. Really.
On Tuesday, March 22, 2005, avlar (24) wrote:

wow...its all i can say
On Tuesday, March 22, 2005, Anth (1126) wrote:

damn incredible write,the imagery, so powerful,and the way you describe it,,,i have to say this poem is flawless, the emerging,contrast, starkness, bleakness all these words spring to mind here..and then that last part, breathtaking