UnFly

By Gideon Lost

Again?
Don’t look at me that way
So small
I hear your giant head laugh
And shake at me
As I ½ myself again
Pondering what was NOT
Once there was a man
Who dreamt he was not a butterfly
No, he was just a plain, old fly
Captured
In an up turned bottle
You have torn me in ½ so many times
Too many times
And I keep hoping against reason
I’ll be too small to be noticed
But you so easily find my ½‘d heart
Picking up with tweezers
Teasing pincers that dissect it yet again
Like you are plucking the wings off a helpless insect
The Unfly
Damned to crawl about, flightless
½ of nothing
Is
Nothing.

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Published on Tuesday, January 4, 2005. Filed under: "Poetry"

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Comments on "UnFly"

A former member wrote: Sooooooo freaking good.
A former member wrote: Hope against reason - I see it as the key to holding sanity. How about u people? Excellent work...
A former member wrote: The world filled with giants when you're vulnerable. They can hurt how ever they want, destroy your world and flick you out of their dreams like a crumb. Chimauron said it first, so I won't say it again. Good One!
A former member wrote: "And I keep hoping against reason I’ll be too small to be noticed" .... this was so unique and so honost and true. i loved this. ....-samone
On Saturday, January 29, 2005, Chimauron (87) wrote:

helpless... insignificant... unheard... unseen... damn that feeling sucks. And you caught it here. Good one.
A former member wrote: hey this was good dont know if it was my understanding but it made me feel small like i was going through the pain you were describing although i agree with phantasma on this one not your best but still very good
On Monday, January 10, 2005, stormtalk (727) wrote:

Nice ending. Honestly, I liked your other writes more, but this was still interesting and enjoyable to read. Maybe you'll find a nice friend to smear some butter on you.
On Sunday, January 9, 2005, VenomPlease (134) wrote:

Nice ending. "1/2 of nothing is nothing". Very cool write.
A former member wrote: you have cool and unique style, like it x
On Thursday, January 6, 2005, DoctorAsh (371) wrote:

Very nice indeed - The combination to a great write lay within this piece. The interpretation of a simple, yet constructive metaphorical backdrop always makes for a flem-tacular write. Excellent. [D&A]
On Tuesday, January 4, 2005, The Crimson Queen (917) wrote:

i enjoyed this, very interesting.
On Tuesday, January 4, 2005, Anth (1126) wrote:

i reallly liked this, made me smile actually,a quality work, original and interesting, superb descriptions
On Tuesday, January 4, 2005, Liz (265) wrote:

Actually, you know what, the more I read this the more I like it. *Favs.
On Tuesday, January 4, 2005, Liz (265) wrote:

Very cool idea, and well developed. It starts quickly, but reading it again gave me a better overall grasp. It's a great image and a very effective description of feeling so small. I can feel what it's like to will oneself invisible.