about your beauty

By jaunty pill

staring at your tresses
I wonder if you
are fantastically drawn
pretty again

or just a
girlish twitter
held by mocking
brown spiky
limbs
and social
proclivities
never usual
to dissipate
in hot mexican
sun.

sometimes
late at night
I correct my
floppy
relationship
back into its
heated
encumber

watching our
tune play
remorseful spicy
beats of courage -

through ebony
colored drapes
a lilac breezy dress
is tied tight
at the tiny expanse
of a concave
backbone

you shiver against
my palm as I tuck
a gold hoop
cuddling the swell
of your earlobe

I imagine the back
of your almost
feline shape
on its legs
roaring with
luminous prose
about your
beauty

the flash fades like
whisky olives from
your grandfathers
old cedar bin -

tonight we
will stand upon
a golden rustic
mexico with
old weeds in
our fingers and
good-bye clouds
aging on us

knowing the
performance
will consist
of mink
collected with
silver tuxes

where circles
of people grip
music and
sing for the
antique of
marriage -

I close the
door waiting
for you to finish
another sparkle
of eyeliner

as you beam.

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Copyright 2005 jaunty pill
Published on Thursday, March 10, 2005.     Filed under: "Reflective" and "Poetry"
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  • doll on the rag On Saturday, June 4, 2005, doll on the rag (200)By person wrote:

    *me there... absolutely lovely, my dear.

  • jaunty pill On Saturday, June 18, 2005, jaunty pill (47)By person wrote:

    I don't know how I missed your comment. :( You are so kind and I can tell that you are also a thoughtful reader. I also find it hard sometimes to tie into a poem , Glad to see that this one could do that for you. Rare moment indeed. Hugs.

  • doll on the rag On Saturday, June 4, 2005, doll on the rag (200)By person wrote:

    there are few poems i enjoy that relate personal memories of places or tie in elements of a sensory-specific area, because they're sometimes hard to fully embrace if you've never been to the place described therein... this is one of those few that takes m

  • Lotophagi On Saturday, April 2, 2005, Lotophagi (333)By person wrote:

    wow, subtly sensual.... amazing descriptions, beautiful flow. superb write. Thank you.

  • A Velvet Tongue On Wednesday, March 23, 2005, A Velvet Tongue (434)By person wrote:

    *tonight we will stand upon a golden rustic mexico with old weeds in our fingers and good-bye clouds aging on us *....this is stellar..the whole piece..and the passage is just invoking..more please!

  • A former member wrote: initially it seemed fatalistic, but had a funny hopeful bent to it by the end. "whiskey olives.. old cedar bin" really stands out in terms or the sights and smells that it evokes.

  • Sin On Monday, March 21, 2005, Sin (1135)By person wrote:

    there are so many pretty lines my mind is stuck in this euphoric state of bliss...i really like your style, you are indeed a must read ~kristy

  • Anth On Saturday, March 19, 2005, Anth (1126)By person wrote:

    i love this, the descriptions are original, unique, a kind of flavour to your poetry, and ive nevr used that word before to describe a poem, refreshing to read something like this

  • A former member wrote: This read so effortlessly.. like you were just having a conversation. usually I find myself noticing forced lines and words.. You don't write that way.. It's refreshing..

  • A former member wrote: Wonderful imagery.. Excellent floetry. "and good-bye clouds aging on us" I had to pause on that line. Lovely, lovely!

  • AniDayz On Friday, March 18, 2005, AniDayz (812)By person wrote:

    damn...the imagery is astounding,just the way you pieced this all together...is amazing. theres a true uniquness about your style that i especially love...

  • The Crimson Queen On Friday, March 11, 2005, The Crimson Queen (917)By person wrote:

    magnificently done! i am in awe

  • purr_verse On Thursday, March 10, 2005, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    beautiful piece; the imagery is wonderfully woven - intricate and unusual yet vividly clear. Gorgeous conclusion in particular, and all-around excellent write.

  • A former member wrote: Now this, this was lovely.

  • A former member wrote: i liked this one and i liked it alot more then the others i commented on nicely done

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