about your beauty
By jaunty pill
staring at your tresses
I wonder if you
are fantastically drawn
pretty again
or just a
girlish twitter
held by mocking
brown spiky
limbs
and social
proclivities
never usual
to dissipate
in hot mexican
sun.
sometimes
late at night
I correct my
floppy
relationship
back into its
heated
encumber
watching our
tune play
remorseful spicy
beats of courage -
through ebony
colored drapes
a lilac breezy dress
is tied tight
at the tiny expanse
of a concave
backbone
you shiver against
my palm as I tuck
a gold hoop
cuddling the swell
of your earlobe
I imagine the back
of your almost
feline shape
on its legs
roaring with
luminous prose
about your
beauty
the flash fades like
whisky olives from
your grandfathers
old cedar bin -
tonight we
will stand upon
a golden rustic
mexico with
old weeds in
our fingers and
good-bye clouds
aging on us
knowing the
performance
will consist
of mink
collected with
silver tuxes
where circles
of people grip
music and
sing for the
antique of
marriage -
I close the
door waiting
for you to finish
another sparkle
of eyeliner
as you beam.
Comments on "about your beauty"
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On Saturday, June 4, 2005, doll on the rag
(200) wrote:
*me there... absolutely lovely, my dear.
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On Saturday, June 18, 2005, jaunty pill
(47) wrote:
I don't know how I missed your comment. :( You are so kind and I can tell that you are also a thoughtful reader. I also find it hard sometimes to tie into a poem , Glad to see that this one could do that for you. Rare moment indeed. Hugs.
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On Saturday, June 4, 2005, doll on the rag
(200) wrote:
there are few poems i enjoy that relate personal memories of places or tie in elements of a sensory-specific area, because they're sometimes hard to fully embrace if you've never been to the place described therein... this is one of those few that takes m
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On Saturday, April 2, 2005, Lotophagi
(333) wrote:
wow, subtly sensual.... amazing descriptions, beautiful flow. superb write. Thank you.
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On Wednesday, March 23, 2005, A Velvet Tongue
(434) wrote:
*tonight we will stand upon a golden rustic mexico with old weeds in our fingers and good-bye clouds aging on us *....this is stellar..the whole piece..and the passage is just invoking..more please!
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A former member wrote:
initially it seemed fatalistic, but had a funny hopeful bent to it by the end. "whiskey olives.. old cedar bin" really stands out in terms or the sights and smells that it evokes.
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On Monday, March 21, 2005, Sin
(1135) wrote:
there are so many pretty lines my mind is stuck in this euphoric state of bliss...i really like your style, you are indeed a must read ~kristy
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On Saturday, March 19, 2005, Anth
(1126) wrote:
i love this, the descriptions are original, unique, a kind of flavour to your poetry, and ive nevr used that word before to describe a poem, refreshing to read something like this
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A former member wrote:
This read so effortlessly.. like you were just having a conversation. usually I find myself noticing forced lines and words.. You don't write that way.. It's refreshing..
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A former member wrote:
Wonderful imagery.. Excellent floetry. "and good-bye clouds aging on us" I had to pause on that line. Lovely, lovely!
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On Friday, March 18, 2005, AniDayz
(812) wrote:
damn...the imagery is astounding,just the way you pieced this all together...is amazing. theres a true uniquness about your style that i especially love...
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On Friday, March 11, 2005, The Crimson Queen
(917) wrote:
magnificently done! i am in awe
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On Thursday, March 10, 2005, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
beautiful piece; the imagery is wonderfully woven - intricate and unusual yet vividly clear. Gorgeous conclusion in particular, and all-around excellent write.
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A former member wrote:
Now this, this was lovely.
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A former member wrote:
i liked this one and i liked it alot more then the others i commented on nicely done