without a car
By Jonas
i was walking through thick fog
to get a pack of cigarettes
rural living
and it felt a little like trying to get
into heaven
when everytime i came upon lights
the refractive properties of the water on the
air formed a halo a few steps in front of me
and i could see a shadow of myself inside
my shape but no face
and the way it played would have me thinking
that a few more steps would have me safely through
the carrot dangles
but my feet would not take me to the other side
the faster i went trying to get inside
the faster the light faded
until the fog swallowed it all and
heaven was just a distant memory
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Copyright 2005 Jonas
Published on Monday, January 17, 2005.
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A former member wrote:
HOT DAMN! and not the drink! this is something to toast to!! mmmmm yessiree I think i was there! no, I did this! wow... what a perfect metaphor what a perfect experience... love ya!
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On Friday, February 18, 2005, Carmina Gitana
(149) wrote:
Great visual quality to this, reminds me of the sort of thing you see when you squint at a street lamp for a long time.
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On Thursday, February 3, 2005, missanthropic
(26) wrote:
in the immortal words of the cure this work is "just like heaven" it really is so close to prefect in flow and imagery...
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On Wednesday, February 2, 2005, urbanhumility
(1158) wrote:
a self imposed managery......bringing insight.......well done jonas.........urban
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On Sunday, January 23, 2005, birdwell
(138) wrote:
i find myself in awe of the way you shape moments into art, it’s astonishing ~db~
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On Friday, January 21, 2005, Liz
(265) wrote:
You're like the twilight zone.
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A former member wrote:
I like your work, and no im not from Sac, I live in England- But don't feel sorry for me. LOL
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A former member wrote:
wow this is cool i like this p.o.v. a very enlightening perspective. Makes us all stop and think something or another I'm sure :) good write Jonas