without a car

By Jonas

i was walking through thick fog
to get a pack of cigarettes
rural living
and it felt a little like trying to get
into heaven
when everytime i came upon lights
the refractive properties of the water on the
air formed a halo a few steps in front of me
and i could see a shadow of myself inside
my shape but no face
and the way it played would have me thinking
that a few more steps would have me safely through
the carrot dangles
but my feet would not take me to the other side
the faster i went trying to get inside
the faster the light faded
until the fog swallowed it all and
heaven was just a distant memory

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Copyright 2005 Jonas
Published on Monday, January 17, 2005.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: HOT DAMN! and not the drink! this is something to toast to!! mmmmm yessiree I think i was there! no, I did this! wow... what a perfect metaphor what a perfect experience... love ya!

  • Carmina Gitana On Friday, February 18, 2005, Carmina Gitana (149)By person wrote:

    Great visual quality to this, reminds me of the sort of thing you see when you squint at a street lamp for a long time.

  • missanthropic On Thursday, February 3, 2005, missanthropic (26)By person wrote:

    in the immortal words of the cure this work is "just like heaven" it really is so close to prefect in flow and imagery...

  • urbanhumility On Wednesday, February 2, 2005, urbanhumility (1158)By person wrote:

    a self imposed managery......bringing insight.......well done jonas.........urban

  • birdwell On Sunday, January 23, 2005, birdwell (138)By person wrote:

    i find myself in awe of the way you shape moments into art, it’s astonishing ~db~

  • Liz On Friday, January 21, 2005, Liz (265)By person wrote:

    You're like the twilight zone.

  • A former member wrote: I like your work, and no im not from Sac, I live in England- But don't feel sorry for me. LOL

  • A former member wrote: wow this is cool i like this p.o.v. a very enlightening perspective. Makes us all stop and think something or another I'm sure :) good write Jonas

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