And he smiled
By Alacer_Cogitatus
And he smiled at the thought,
Not of their suffering, No, But
For their sickened nods of
surrender
He took care not to disturb the
Remaining vestiges of
Privacy, for he cared not of
Perverted acts on Immodasty
He was Becoming.
A form unknown, yet
Ever Present and lurking.
He demanded much of His
Host, and giving little as
A sign of good will.
Lateral cuts, placed properly on
The neck, produced terrific
Sounds of the deadliest death calls
To ever have been issued forth from
A mans depths.
Two more secondary cuts, and
The whistling stopped, long enough
Though to be replaced with the sounds
of blood entering at high velocity
Into the lungs.
And through all the display of
Unreal strangulation, He sat.
And Smiled. For His time had come
His face, bearing the expression of
The Wordly Scholor and Mentallay
Insane alike, soon changed to that of
Transfiguration.
He was going to be One. Yin and Yang.
Good and Evil. Love and Hate.
All In One.
And yet, a pause. Thoughts turn
quickly, to scenes of pure
Ecstasy.
As quickly as it arrived,
It vanished.
The corpse lay still,
Too Still for His purpose
His time was Gone
And fear rose within Him,
Choking with an acidic
Smell
As pungent as burned
Flesh on an open fire.
In his ears the sound of light
Rain on stretched Canvas
As he choked and drowned
In his thoughts of utter
Desolation
And upon His Death, the last
Words he thought spew forth:
Il cuore e l'anima dell'uomo possono non essere calmati mai finchè dalla
malvagità, l'ordine, la prosperità, legge, (perfetta) fiorisce. Soltanto
con la corruzione è l'uomo perfetto.
("The heart and soul of man can never be stilled from evil, as long
as order, prosperity, lawfulness, (UTOPIA) flourish. Only with Corruption
is man perfect.)"
And He smiled.
Comments on "And he smiled"
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On Wednesday, February 2, 2005, disc
(36) wrote:
The big word that stands out here is "wow." I enjoyed your beautiful alliteration and the image you burned in my mind. I also love how you wrote of "yin and yang," good idea to intertwine this into your work. Wonderful!
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On Tuesday, December 28, 2004, Sepulcrawl
(78) wrote:
I'm a big fan of the end line.. it was close to brilliant.. but the rest of it i'm a bit iffy on in some places.. still, good write -pxc
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On Monday, December 27, 2004, Anth
(1133) wrote:
this is a great work,throuroughly well written and thought out,the ending is perfect and the message was like an icicle buried into my mind
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On Tuesday, December 21, 2004, Sin
(1168) wrote:
wow...just wow..this was full of intense images and i love the end ~kristy
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A former member wrote:
*gasps*. Beautifully acute, silently deranged, wonderfully written, glorious vivid images strung with chords of murderous honesties. You are an inspiration.
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On Thursday, December 16, 2004, Full blame
(28) wrote:
the highlights are notes on your writing. I get a lot from this. marvelous, really
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On Wednesday, December 15, 2004, K_Love
(525) wrote:
"Rain on stretched Canvas As he choked and drowned In his thoughts of utter Desolation" Clever write. Beautifully written.
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A former member wrote:
brillaint write
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On Wednesday, December 15, 2004, NikesRain
(1298) wrote:
..wow...i had to read this at least twice to take it all in properly. Extremely intense and vivid, sent chills through me the whole time. wonderful job
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A former member wrote:
oh wow man. this spun me around in so many different arcs, yet all leading around the same circumference. such a complete write, i love it when i get to read words such as these strung together, awesome.
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On Wednesday, December 15, 2004, BeautifulCalamity
(428) wrote:
"As he choked and drowned In his thoughts of utter Desolation". . chilling words, lovely work
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On Wednesday, December 15, 2004, BeautifulCalamity
(428) wrote:
loved, absolutely LOVED the fourth stanza. . but there was so much more to this, the quote at the end. . and the line "and he smiled" said so much in general. the acid stench.. burning flesh.. every words paints a picture, an honest piece. . a great write