simple sentences of wanting
By BeautifulCalamity
"And how will your night dances lose themselves
--in mathematics?" -- S.Plath
you still burn me,
you pinch my veins
with the skepticism that
so easily tears out of your heart..
--like the walls that surround you were
already caving in--
and I am told, over the twisted
lines of this solemn telephone
that utopia is unreachable,
but that I'll always touch
only to be crushed..
perhaps emptiness should fill me,
and pearl white dresses should slip
off of my body.
revealed, revealing..
I am the crushed pills.
show me all you are.
never shun, never shun
and defeated bed sheets hang
down from waxy candles,
the waxy candles on your wall.
your vines remind me of my childhood..
-I'll never know why you are not here-
"of thee I sing, tied to a string"
Comments on "simple sentences of wanting"
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On Monday, January 10, 2005, K_Love
(525) wrote:
I know I've commented on this before but I think you deserve better. This was an amazing piece. The first three stanza hit me hard. "that utopia is unreachable, but that I'll always touch only to be crushed.." Inspiring write, I loved every word.
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A former member wrote:
Good write.
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On Friday, December 24, 2004, Rone4611
(121) wrote:
I just re-read it and want to comment again haha, i must say, i really can relate to this feeilng and it brings memories rushing back, utopia cant be reached... very sexy
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A former member wrote:
amazing i love everything you write. you always blow my mind.
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On Friday, November 26, 2004, blue
(1409) wrote:
oh, you make me dizzy~~~swoon, swoon...
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On Wednesday, November 10, 2004, Zhee
(529) wrote:
this was amazing... a truly beautiful piece of work!
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On Wednesday, November 10, 2004, Rone4611
(121) wrote:
lol, im a fan now! lol. this and gleaming of insects are frigging awesome!
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On Wednesday, November 10, 2004, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
I've liked some of yours, I've not liked some of yours...but this left me with my jaw on the floor...beautiful has to be the best way to describe it.
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On Tuesday, November 9, 2004, K_Love
(525) wrote:
Very unique, made me think and feel like I was in a fantasy for some reason. Beautiful write. :)
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A former member wrote:
nothing short of exquisite. Beautiful!
Sarah
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On Tuesday, November 9, 2004, urbanhumility
(1158) wrote:
fantastic..........steeped in longing.....tasty dark........urban
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A former member wrote:
-profound. This is wonderful. ~ Rose.
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A former member wrote:
___wow. "perhaps emptiness should fill me, and pearl white dresses should slip
off of my body. revealed, revealing..
I am the crushed pills. show me all you are." ~ your work is too beautiful sometimes; too unbearably exquisite. Your talent is profoun