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If
By lordshadow
if life was nothing but a joke
could laughter mend the broken hearts?
could smiles heal their shattered parts?
if life was nothing but a joke
if life was nothing but a game
could screaming fans erase the pain?
could they wash away the bloody stains?
if life was nothing but a game
if life was nothing but a test
could you answer all the questions right?
or would you cry to sleep each night?
if life was nothing but a test
if life was nothing but just one choice
would you choose sorrow, pain, or love?
you can't choose 'all of the above'
if life is nothing but just one choice
but what if life is but a dream?
would you take that life by waking up?
{pinches himself to see if...}
...and we all drift gently down the stream
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Copyright 2004 lordshadow
Published on Monday, October 4, 2004.
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On Tuesday, December 18, 2012, BrideToAgony
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wrote:
I love the ending and the line about only being able to pick one choice. You have real talent, keep it up!
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On Tuesday, December 18, 2012, PoetessDarkly
(700) wrote:
awesome write. love the structure and imagery
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A former member wrote:
Great poem, love the style.
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On Tuesday, December 18, 2012, Stephanie Sideways
(276) wrote:
This was a pretty perfect, thought provoking, cleverly constructed piece! Really good poetry!
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On Tuesday, December 18, 2012, eidos
(41) wrote:
this was amazing.
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A former member wrote:
I meant to spell "Buddha". Sorry.
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A former member wrote:
As such, the Bhudda also said the same.
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On Sunday, August 21, 2005, Serenity
(469) wrote:
This is brillant! Thought provoking.
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A former member wrote:
great piece, very creative and well thought out. would you choose sorrow, pain or love. wow. I think life must be a choice cause most people are into one of the above.
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On Wednesday, April 13, 2005, so_skeevy
(64) wrote:
wow. Brilliant.
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A former member wrote:
*sigh* Stop making me sad, love.
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On Monday, October 4, 2004, purr_verse
(1059) wrote:
very clever, and excellently constructed, write. great use of metaphor/simile; love the conclusion too... Great work!
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On Monday, October 4, 2004, Dayer
(162) wrote:
This rocked! "but what if life is but a dream? would you take that life by waking up? " wow hun...just WOW
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On Monday, October 4, 2004, DarkDruidess
(326) wrote:
Interesting thought process...written with great rhythm and a wonderful choice of words...If life was nothing but pain, would you choose to do it again? Nice work...
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On Monday, October 4, 2004, NikesRain
(1298) wrote:
..like the way this moved, the contemplations it causes. how true we all drift along, it's the learning to stop kicking and screaming that gets us. Nicely done
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A former member wrote:
that was wonderful. i was especially caught on "would you choose sorrow, pain, or love?
you can't choose 'all of the above'" and i have no idea what i would do... but this was a wonderful peice!
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On Monday, October 4, 2004, Angst Queen
(370) wrote:
i liked the flow of this (no pun intended)
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On Monday, October 4, 2004, Zhee
(529) wrote:
merrily, merrily people go down the waterfall too :) excellent work.. loved the flow! (pardon the crude comment)
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