Deep Six Elated
By Mistress Morbid
I got a glimpse of joy today
and warmed my smile beyond credence
to be tricked into an illusion so
real, and tangible is phenomenal
day dreams become reality and
nightmares a figment of my canny ingenuity
s-l-o-w-l-y v.a.n.i.s.h.i.n.g
without a trace
I touched the sky today and
it made me feel renewed and
luminous, like floating through air
weightless and as light as a
feather, hypnotizing and enticing
reaching up into water in lieu
of nether lesser, a fairy tale come true
I met a boy today who
lit up my world and showed
me things I could only muse of
he grabbed my hand and
taught me to fly, to let go
of my fears and doubts and be
free, free as a bird with no
chance of receiving clipped wings
Today I attended a funeral to say
goodbye to my only best friend
Comments on "Deep Six Elated"
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On Thursday, July 22, 2004, Ravenblade
(307) wrote:
very sad twisvt thrown in at the end, but still great write nonetheless...I'm still in awe by your expansive use of the english language...>Raven<
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On Saturday, May 22, 2004, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
The last two lines were gutting and devastating, so sad.. I loved the second stanza, gorgeous imagery. Eloquent work Morb. ~L
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On Saturday, May 22, 2004, Midnight Shadow
(67) wrote:
Awwww...the ending is so sad. Somehow, it fits with the poem, but then again, it doesn't. *shrugs* Loved it, unique. ~MS~
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On Saturday, May 22, 2004, Anth
(1126) wrote:
i actually found this to be so positive , i love the elation of the words and the nature of the flow here,i really enjoyed this work
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A former member wrote:
The end kind of killed the lovely euphoric feeling I was getting from this, but it was still wonderful