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Doors- {Satchel full of Malice}
By A Velvet Tongue
You had me from hello..
Or was it just goodbye
a satchel full of malice
a winter left to die
Clinging to the iceberg
that frosted o'er your heart
hanging from a street sign
no direction left to chart
Whimsical in nature
eden and his rock
callous and abandoned
passion's stoic rot
Welted by a freehand
loving was the verse
stained a faded yellow
amazingly perverse
Chained within your torture
smooth as vicious cream
haunting now my hallways
bound within my dreams
Emptied of tommorrows
fantasies that crash
visions left you seething
That brutal hunger,.. crass
Dip into the cauldron
infernal is its core
save me from your rainbow
close another door..
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Copyright 2004 Beverly L. Hernandez
Published on Thursday, March 11, 2004.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "Doors- {Satchel full of Malice}"
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A former member wrote:
this is amazing i love it good job x
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A former member wrote:
This is such a lovely piece...with a lonely undertone to it.
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On Friday, March 19, 2004, hate_doll
(263)
wrote:
mm...such excellent execution and flow...this is vivid and alluring...I do miss reading your works daily...I must get back into the routine :)
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On Tuesday, March 16, 2004, maddin foxxxy
(358) wrote:
Wonderful opening! .. "You had me from hello.." ..and amazing closure.. "save me from your rainbow close another door.." ...every word in between just made a great complement for each other ..I am absolutely in love with this one.
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On Friday, March 12, 2004, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
Oh wow, so beautiful. With this piece you've created a shockingly vivid picture, with some beautifully executed lines. Holding on to a love even though you know it's gone.. Exquisite. ~L
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On Friday, March 12, 2004, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
This whole thing really took a hold on me. I found myself reading aloud and not realizing it. Great job, vel. Wonderfully written.
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On Friday, March 12, 2004, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
Yes. beautiful pic.
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A former member wrote:
I adore the third stanza...and the rest of it is spectacular as well. +T.P.U+
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On Thursday, March 11, 2004, sulkylime
(191) wrote:
the first line had me thinking of jerry maguire ..sorry couldn't help it hehe -- nice flow to it all, good write
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