Discomfiting Twilight

By nightshade

You stare through me as if you’ve lost your sight
Standing there discomfited by the twilight
The shadows grow deeper and coalesce into one
I stand here not knowing what needs to be done
You use the light to keep the darkness at bay
Yet you’re scared to walk in the full light of day
A gothic romance that plays itself out
Leaving you there so full of doubts
You’re scared to face your fears
So they’ve grown over the years
An ominous picture has been created
While you lay there feeling desecrated
Spun round in circles never to break free
Will you spin round indefinitely?
Realize there is beauty that is not seen
Even in the most hideous and unclean
Search within and find the strength you hold dear
Where it waits invisible behind your tears
Step forward and break this cycle so vicious
For this your reward will be most delicious
Step out of the darkness into the light
Fix this malignancy within your sight
Don’t allow yourself to be a victim any longer
For confronting your fears just makes you stronger

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Published on Wednesday, March 3, 2004. Filed under: "Abuse" and "Poetry"

Comments on "Discomfiting Twilight"

On Saturday, October 9, 2010, Asylum (7) wrote:

A terrible trauma has occurred. So terrible, in fact, that it has been suppressed within your mind for years for fear of merely the thought of reliving it in your mind. But, if you were to muster up your courage, break out, and tell this tale so sickening and morbid, then, and only then shall you reap your vengeance, and free yourself from the torment that's plagued you for what may seem like a lifetime. Open yourself to others, grasp outstretched hands as if they were your lifeline, and they shall guide you to the light. There, you shall receive bastion, and bounty.
On Wednesday, February 23, 2005, Elise (187) wrote:

This flowed nicely, unforced to rhyme and flowed nicely. Such a nice message, I have to read more of your stuff sometime soon. ^_^
On Sunday, February 13, 2005, BoldSolitude (214) wrote:

Nice message, rhyme was excellant, In the second to last line I believe you meant to say *any instead of *and
A former member wrote: wow. i really like. the whole poem was ver moving and amazing. good write
A former member wrote: I like how you wrapped this one up in the end, especially the last 4 lines. Nicely written:) ~Ship!
On Thursday, March 4, 2004, flying_fox (571) wrote:

I like this Night...very heartfelt and some lovely turns of phrase. I agree with Bast re the rhyme, though some of it is very strong. You're a sweetheart. FF
On Thursday, March 4, 2004, nell (270) wrote:

i would have to say thta this really does not sound forced like most rhyming poems in that form, you did a really good job getting your point accross and using an array of words to do it, great work;)
On Wednesday, March 3, 2004, BoldSolitude (214) wrote:

I liked the rhyming sequence and the unexpected words you used as rhymns.
On Wednesday, March 3, 2004, Lynaes (854) wrote:

I agree with Bast, I love what you're saying and how you say it. Lovely work. ~L
A former member wrote: Mad props, dear...this one owns.
On Wednesday, March 3, 2004, KittyStryker (710) wrote:

i like the fact that this basically says "life sucks. but it's not all bad." don't get caught up in rhyme- your rhythm would be better, methinks, if you weren't trying to do an aa bb scheme.