Liquid Sky
By sole
On the pier of our lake
I was greeted from behind
With a gun and a joke.
At least I thought it was funny.
He didn't. He was broke.
Motivated by my wealth,
My non-existence
Was to his benefit.
He was tempted by a love
I used to share.
A love that was no longer there.
I thought she needed me to live
But I guess he kept her alive.
So she plotted to achieve
A life divine, a life without me.
Death rang from the chamber,
With a blunt force and a pierce.
I was propelled through the air,
Cushioned by a splash
As the water scattered.
I wasn't bothered by the pain
Because air was all that mattered.
....Twenty years ago
Was my first memory.
I was late for a birthday party
At a friend's house.
The smell of childhood lingering.
Laughter abound.
What a glorious sound.
After the party
I had my first day of highschool.
Stumbling through the halls
Adding a dent to the lockered walls.
Reeking of weed and wading
Through uknowns, feeling small.
Summer was great
But it came to an end.
I remember Mom crying
And Dad holding it in
When they dropped me off at college;
Weighted down with suitcases
And ready for this new phase of life to begin.
The courtyard felt so much more
Established than anything in highschool.
There was a sense of purpose in the air,
But a lack of urgency.
So many faces everywhere
In no real hurry.
Friday at two 'o clock
Sent bubbles through my stomach
Every week.
It was my favorite class
Or at least my favorite place to be.
I sat behind the future of my life,
A woman and a wife.
Her hair would tell me stories
And invoke fantasies.
I finally asked her out,
And it was well recieved, thankfully.
We got married in the fall.
Auburn and brown surround.
Hypnotizing.
Leaves were all over the ground,
And pinestraw got in her veil,
But no one cared.
I remember her laughing by the lake
As I shoved that first piece of cake
In her mouth.
She was so beautiful that day,
Standing out like vanilla
Ice cream in a chocolate dream....
A short time passed
Blurring the validity
Of my memory.
Remembering the good things,
And oblivious to the tragedy that remained.
I finally grew tired of swimming,
And decided to sink with the pain.
My life had flashed before eyes.
Consumed in demise that gave rise
To the canopy of my liquid sky.
Awards
Comments on "Liquid Sky"
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A former member wrote:
Beautiful.
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A former member wrote:
I like to visit this place from time to time. It's a stunning memory every time. Thanks again for sharing. ~Ship
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On Monday, February 7, 2005, DoctorAsh
(371) wrote:
wonderful write, an excellent trip into the vibrating memories of a fellow being. this shall be remembered
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On Saturday, January 8, 2005, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
The ninth and last stanzas stuck out to me in particular, though the whole write is very nicely done - it kept me interested throughout. G'job!
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A former member wrote:
I love the way you take a break in the middle to go back.. the entire thing kept me riveted, wanting to know more. the end left me as though i had died as well.. wonderfully done.
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On Monday, April 5, 2004, Emptyness Inside Me
(171) wrote:
this is a very well writin piece, excellent flow and content, amazing words, a whole lifetime written in not very many words, great piece ~Emptyness~
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A former member wrote:
i love this one. esp the ending. i lvoe the whole flow of it and how you are able to tell ur "life-story" interestingly and with such power to captivate me even till the end.
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On Wednesday, March 3, 2004, The Fallen Angel
(234) wrote:
i'm impressed, concrete and down to earth...very inspirational and fun to read...publish quality indeed+fallen one+
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On Monday, January 5, 2004, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
*picks up jaw* .. write it on a piece of paper and sign it.. and I'll give you the papers to my banana tree.. *drobs jaw again*
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A former member wrote:
I thought I had commented on this. I suppose not. And as I read it again...I was stunned speachless. A wonderfully written tale even thought the content is sorrow filled.
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On Friday, January 2, 2004, Methos
(121) wrote:
Wow, you know i've read this one about a ten times before, i can't believe i didnt' comment on it though. Amazing, beautiful work sole!!!! -Methos
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On Friday, December 26, 2003, Cwn Annwn
(89) wrote:
That was really good...I haven't experienced half those things but...I liked the sence of reality in this one.~GoNe~
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On Friday, November 28, 2003, Ophelia
(221) wrote:
I am in awe, the way it makes me shiver, as if this is my story and I am reliving it, beautifully tragic.....O.
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On Friday, November 28, 2003, OLd SouL
(717) wrote:
I wanted to comment on this again cuz I liked it so much. :) :::OLd
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A former member wrote:
gripping and very well written. U.P.
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On Sunday, November 23, 2003, Storm
(143) wrote:
I'm speechless... wonderful, beautiful. Masterpiece.
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A former member wrote:
I'm stunned. Awsome. ~Urban Shipwreck~
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On Sunday, November 23, 2003, cre
(410) wrote:
wow. this is unbelievable . . chills as i finished reading it . . it captivated me like nothing else has in quite some time . . fantastic job, very, very well-done.
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On Saturday, November 22, 2003, urbanhumility
(1158) wrote:
an eloquently manifested memory.....painfully beautiful.........urban
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On Saturday, November 22, 2003, Spiritus_Frumenti
(340) wrote:
wow....i honestly love this piece...so beautiful, sad and sincere....this is definitely one of my favs...very nicely done...-l-
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On Saturday, November 22, 2003, OLd SouL
(717) wrote:
what a fantastic story... Your entire life relived in the last moment before death... very very enjoyable to read. :::OLd