The Child

By Methos

His shirt tucked neatly in
hands placed perfectly on his lap
his feet still....unmoving
Not a smudge nor smear on his cleansed face
Strong and structured, hair neatly combed
he sits
in perfect posture

It's his eye's I notice
the fear
the pain
of the hand that strikes
the pressure of excelling
petrified of failure
he sits
in perfect pose

This perfect statue of a child
molded so perfect
that it seems
the childhood has been taken
and this shell is all that remains.

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Copyright 2003 Methos
Published on Monday, November 17, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Northstar On Thursday, July 29, 2004, Northstar (374)By person wrote:

    ohhhhh this hits very hard...beautifully expressed

  • knightmirror On Friday, January 30, 2004, knightmirror (426)By person wrote:

    very creative piece,full of draining recollections.made me think of things i thought were dead

  • -Oz- On Saturday, January 17, 2004, -Oz- (131)By person wrote:

    i hate watching little kids get pussy whiped by their mothers or who ever...they loose their character...they definatly turn into statues.....sadly *sniff sniff*~YeStErDaY~

  • A former member wrote: GAve me goose bumps.....

  • A former member wrote: This poem reminds me of a song I love by Alanis Morresette "We'll love you, just the way you are, if you're perfect." Some people just shouldn't be parents. To restict their child from living the life that is rightfully theirs...

  • A former member wrote: that just angers me beyond words...

  • frost bite On Tuesday, November 18, 2003, frost bite (43)By person wrote:

    'and this shell is all that remains' that is a perfect statement! loved it

  • Ophelia On Tuesday, November 18, 2003, Ophelia (221)By person wrote:

    I was unsure in the start but then it grabed me. I feel the sorrow and pain "perfect statue of a child" to me this has said more then any work here, thank you.................O.

  • yslehc On Monday, November 17, 2003, yslehc (334)By person wrote:

    this reminds me of my brother... i like it, it's good

  • Drea On Monday, November 17, 2003, Drea (1388)By person wrote:

    vivid images. i enjoyed this a lot. ~Drea~

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