Falling Stars
By xZombie Poptartzx
She was young,
delicate…
Making shattered wishes
on each shooting star,
in hopes of
stopping the desolate.
With a heart
so pure, still
believing in magic.
Though her eyes
had witnessed
flagrant acts
from the tragic.
Never confusing
A satellite for a star,
she’d memorized
each constellation.
Certain her wishes
must be granted,
by such a
promising creation.
Dreaming of stardust
falling to earth,
being sprinkled
through fingers like sand.
While the moon
compelled each one
from the sky,
helping those fix what they
could not withstand.
Deeply haunted with
‘Black-Hole’ memories,
from a mind left
tattered, and jaded.
Until she recognized
stars as merely
balls of gas
and all the magic…
finally faded.
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Comments on "Falling Stars"
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A former member wrote:
I love this poem. magic is real though, to me anyway. it never fades, it never dies. great work here. really.
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On Saturday, August 24, 2013, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
Another tragic case of innocence's magic lost to mind ravaging reality!! It really sucks that the magic always fades, nice write...
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A former member wrote:
Wisdom comes at a pretty steep price, mysteries are solved, optimism turns sour, and aspirations change to resignation. One must constantly keep ones eyes open to see the beauty in the world, its lost on many of us however, maybe even wasted. This was really quite a saddening read, felt like I was witnessing someones innocence fleet away through clenched fingers.
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On Wednesday, August 7, 2013, PoetessDarkly
(693) wrote:
Fuck girl you can rock! this is awesome.
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A former member wrote:
and finally all dreams fade with time..and dark reality starts to creep in.. dolorous write.. vivid and engrossing..
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A former member wrote:
the rhythm is intrinsic and awe-striking... this trails across the mind like stardust... your poetry has grown leaps and bounds. this is pretty amazing stuff. my favorite stanza was the second to last. xo
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A former member wrote:
This is beautiful, and it reminds me of how I used to be.
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On Sunday, August 4, 2013, dwells
(4177) wrote:
ZPT - I think you might prefer "Stopping desolation" in the last line of the first stanza. Meanwhile, this was oozing innocence and hope for a better tomorrow - the magic is inside you, cheers!
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On Saturday, August 3, 2013, LindaHagan
(3) wrote:
Nicely written...bookmarked for me to read again and again
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On Saturday, August 3, 2013, Nehema
(958) wrote:
When reality sets in...truth perspective can be a bitch. Bit then the truth sets us free so we can see real stars for what they really are. Beautiful post - XXOO
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A former member wrote:
Falling Stars That's A Good One,, I Liked Reading.. Xoxo :]
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On Saturday, August 3, 2013, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
You are a force to be fondled darling dark princess. thank you so much for showing up after working your ass off all day i love you and appreciate you.
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On Friday, August 2, 2013, Sean Mc Shane
(606) wrote:
This was excellent all the way. Conjured up all sorts of memories and feelings. ome I still feel. Too cool. Til next time -
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On Friday, August 2, 2013, soul_versing
(774) wrote:
Wow darling this is amazing! So deep with elegance this gave me goosebumps. 10/10 Bows-
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On Friday, August 2, 2013, blue angel
(866) wrote:
This is brilliantly written :)~ Imagery is stunning too ~ Well done xoxo
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On Friday, August 2, 2013, NarcissusNarcosis
(94) wrote:
Wow...this is deep; I love the rhyming pattern here, your flow is top-level.."Never confusing a satellite for a star, she memorized each constellation.." so poetic...Absolutely amazing, definitely something I will read again; incredible post! -NN
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A former member wrote:
Very nicely written. i love how you tied it together