Cruel Twist of Fate
By Peyton1
"CRUEL TWIST OF FATE" By: Michael Peyton
I stand off in the distance, pondering what might have been;
Knowing all too painfully well, I can never see YOU again.
Why does my heart still so desperately seek your attention?
Maybe because of things that went too long unmentioned.
It used to be so plain that anyone could easily see;
Now I'm not too sure, that I am even still ME!!
Not STILL me? who was I even back then?
Without you, surely not what I could've been;
I try hard to go through the motions each day;
Though I fear my life is still slipping further away.
I attempt at times to grasp and tightly hold on;
But my grip is now weaker, alas, not nearly as strong.
My spirit once like the wild mustang -- free, untamed;
Now lies all but completely broken -- crippled, maimed.
As the clutches seem to tighten around my throat;
I think back, and regret not giving you the letter I wrote.
Quite possibly things would only be different, not better;
But maybe not the same path that led where I met her.
The path I took may have been the wrong one;
Though its clearly in the past now and cannot be undone.
Always wondered what it meant, "Cruel Twist of Fate";
Guess I learned the hard way, I think a little too late.
If ever you should need me, I wont be hard to find;
Just look on the dark side of fate, the side that's unkind.
Author's Note:
Not sure it's dark enough to be here, but it my first one. Thoughts and comments welcome.....Awards
Comments on "Cruel Twist of Fate"
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A former member wrote:
I think we all have that one special person, (perhaps our first love) that we wish we could go back to or hope they come back to us, but life and fate usually dictates neither of these wishes to be true. What really makes it bad is when lifes circumstances pulls 2 people apart, and throws them each in different directions, to be never seen again. The pain and regret is real, but above all this, life goes on, and so must we also, or we will miss out on the things that are meant for us.
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On Tuesday, May 20, 2014, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
But what if we come to find out there are NO things meant for us? Then what? Thanks for the comment dude..................... ~ACE~
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On Sunday, December 1, 2013, Alchemist
(679) wrote:
I haven't been on DP in a few months but now that I'm back I am happy to see such great new talent. The technique used in this work was flawless and you conveyed your message well. I checked out your profile and noticed you are from NC, I'm from the Raleigh area so it's cool to meet other area poets. Keep up the good work and I will for sure check out some of your other works.
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On Tuesday, December 3, 2013, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
Thanks Alchemist, always good to hear from others in the Carolinas! I will check your works as well. I'm around the Hickory area currently. I try to do variety of poems. The hardest thing for me is to keep them somewhat short, they all want to become stories. Thanks for reading and the comment,....
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On Wednesday, October 30, 2013, soul_versing
(774) wrote:
I'm in love with heartbreaks for some weired reason... I believe it's when a poet truly becomes a poet. Beautifully written. Bows Michael-
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On Wednesday, October 30, 2013, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
Why thank you Nett, I greatly appreciate your comments! I haven't been on here too much lately, was working on song lyrics to transform "River" into a Pat Benatar song. I think it turned out well. Never enough time in the day. Thanks for reading my work....
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On Wednesday, October 30, 2013, soul_versing
(774) wrote:
You're starting to sound like me... There isn't enough hours in a day. You're welcome. .hugs.
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On Wednesday, October 30, 2013, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
I'm going to draw a petition, ha! Once a week, two months per year (three during leap year), we need two days added together without night between them!! Then maybe we can get some of these things done, LOL
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On Tuesday, August 13, 2013, Intoxicating Delirium
(273) wrote:
Wow this is wonderful, regrets are hard to get over.. Great write :)
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On Tuesday, August 13, 2013, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
Thank you, and yes regrets are hard to deal with. Especially when there are quite a few. Guess it's one thing we all have in common.......
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On Thursday, August 8, 2013, PoetessDarkly
(693) wrote:
wow very impressive. loved the darkness of this piece. thank you for your kind comment on my work.
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On Tuesday, August 13, 2013, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
Thanks! Can't hear that too often, glad you like it.
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On Wednesday, August 7, 2013, blue angel
(866) wrote:
Wow.. dang this is quite painful yet beautifully penned with a perfect rhyme;) A sweet release to ease the pain, hopefully* Well done, Peyton !
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On Wednesday, August 7, 2013, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
Thank you for that. A sweet release, yes. Pain never seems to go away completely, but tends to ease a little with each write. I'm working on a very DARK piece now, hope to have it ready soon. Guess I will use this style as my main focus......rhyme that flows out the story, seems to work. Thanks again for reading.
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On Wednesday, August 14, 2013, blue angel
(866) wrote:
I'm looking forward to reading your very dark piece to come :)~ And you're very welcome... Write on my friend*
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A former member wrote:
A beautiful poem. I, being a stupid little kid, know pretty much nothing about love, divorces, broken hearts and the like, but still, STILL I could feel that strain, that certain agony through every single word of this piece. You shouldnt need to worry about whether or not this poem is dark enough; it would fit beautifully on this site. Encore!
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On Wednesday, August 7, 2013, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
Thanks queen666, you, like most of us, will gain your experience points soon enough. I just hope and wish for you more good points than bad. I'm still trying to manage more reading time, I could stay lost inside the works on this site for days on end!! Too bad I have to work.............
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On Thursday, August 1, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx
(332) wrote:
This was very well put together. The flow and rhyme scheme were great. and don't worry about what others think, there's always going to be someone who doesn't like what we write, so why not just write whatever the hell we want? :p I look forward to reading more xoxo
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On Friday, August 2, 2013, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
Thanks a bunch, you guys are great! I will be posting another piece today, hope it goes over as well. This is the style I adopted to use, I like the depth it gives to my thoughts......
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On Thursday, August 1, 2013, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Some wonderful couplets strung together with a sense of loss, yet perhaps inevitability. Quite mature and a fine intro to DP - welcome!
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On Wednesday, August 7, 2013, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
Thanks, and yes inevitability is an accurate description. Thanks for reading and for the welcome.
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A former member wrote:
this is great, I really enjoyed it. very touching
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On Wednesday, August 7, 2013, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
Thank you, it's great for me to see that my first shot at poetry is maybe not so bad after all.
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On Thursday, August 1, 2013, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
Hello there you . never worry about what is suppose to be conveyed in lines that is why i am so notoriously hated. =).. you will be told this isn't poetry . it is. these are your thoughts and feelings and putting them together is beautiful.. fuck what anybody else thinks!! welcome to darkpoetry. make sure to roam around and read others and it will bring them back to you .. my "poetry" is very very offensive for the most part and i catch hell for it. but hey what one don't like 5 others will. if you eva need anything i'm a click away;.
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On Thursday, August 1, 2013, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
Thanks for the welcome. "Offensive" to one, is beautiful to another! I look forward to reading your work.
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On Thursday, August 1, 2013, andhaka
(168) wrote:
I like the easy flow and rhyme scheme. I've always found that fate works in strange ways...sometimes it takes something good from you but down the road you gain something great. There's always a reason. Great work on a first piece : ) I really enjoyed it.
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On Thursday, August 1, 2013, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
Thanks! Glad you like it, hope many more will. I'm finding all kinds of greatness on this site, I like it here already!!
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A former member wrote:
This is great! I really connect to this, probably not how it was intended. Sadly it makes me think of my brother, how he's dealing with life right now. It's been almost 8 years since i last saw him. Thank you for this it is an amazing write!!!
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On Wednesday, October 30, 2013, Peyton1
(204) wrote:
Thank you Wolfie, you are very kind with your words. Don't know your situation, but 8 years is a really long time. I can't even go 8 days without pestering my little brother. Thanks again, see ya!