Damned

By Deathkitten

Trampling solid ground,
Unearthly beings hear thy sound,
Rumbling & roaring beneath thy feet,
Dark forces come forth to meet,
Voices of reason encircling thee,
Wings of a dove fly away free,
Empty shell is left behind,
Claws of death are not so kind,
Lift this burden from thy shoulders,
Secrets revealed like stones & boulders,
Sacrifice the innocent lamb,
Shall it's blood run thick thy will be damned.

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Copyright 2013 Deathkitten
Published on Tuesday, January 15, 2013.     Filed under: "Spiritual" and "Poetry"
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  • Ortolan On Tuesday, May 28, 2013, Ortolan (214)By person wrote:

    I like the style, and it enhanced the subject matter nicely as well.

  • deathndismay On Thursday, January 17, 2013, deathndismay (93)By person wrote:

    This is a very dark piece. I love the feel, the grit. 10/10

  • Deathkitten On Tuesday, January 15, 2013, Deathkitten (573)By person wrote:

    @BeautifulCorruption- Thank you, glad you appreciate it & caught on ;)

  • Deathkitten On Tuesday, January 15, 2013, Deathkitten (573)By person wrote:

    @Dwells- It was necessary for me. It's my poem & preference. I don't believe I was limited to certain words. I guess it wasn't necessary back then. I like older styles honestly & use it in my material at times. Sorry you didn't dig it. I'm an atheist, it wasn't in any biblical sense. Thanks for the welcome. It's lovely here.

  • dwells On Wednesday, January 16, 2013, dwells (4288)By person wrote:

    Pardon my coarse introduction, I'm such a kibbitzer! You are the boss and we do have several poets who regularly dabble in olde English. Welcome again and you are most gracious, thanks!

  • A former member wrote: Love it and the rhyme scheme really adds effect. Personally, I like that you used thee and thy, as it really sets the mood. It almost reminds me of the way an ancient curse would be written, which is cool.

  • dwells On Tuesday, January 15, 2013, dwells (4288)By person wrote:

    Not sure the thee and thy was necessary but the ending was a great metaphor and welcome to DP!

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