Damned

By Deathkitten

Trampling solid ground,
Unearthly beings hear thy sound,
Rumbling & roaring beneath thy feet,
Dark forces come forth to meet,
Voices of reason encircling thee,
Wings of a dove fly away free,
Empty shell is left behind,
Claws of death are not so kind,
Lift this burden from thy shoulders,
Secrets revealed like stones & boulders,
Sacrifice the innocent lamb,
Shall it's blood run thick thy will be damned.

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Published on Tuesday, January 15, 2013. Filed under: "Spiritual" and "Poetry"

Comments on "Damned"

On Tuesday, May 28, 2013, Ortolan (214) wrote:

I like the style, and it enhanced the subject matter nicely as well.
On Thursday, January 17, 2013, deathndismay (92) wrote:

This is a very dark piece. I love the feel, the grit. 10/10
On Tuesday, January 15, 2013, Deathkitten (571) wrote:

@BeautifulCorruption- Thank you, glad you appreciate it & caught on ;)
On Tuesday, January 15, 2013, Deathkitten (571) wrote:

@Dwells- It was necessary for me. It's my poem & preference. I don't believe I was limited to certain words. I guess it wasn't necessary back then. I like older styles honestly & use it in my material at times. Sorry you didn't dig it. I'm an atheist, it wasn't in any biblical sense. Thanks for the welcome. It's lovely here.
On Wednesday, January 16, 2013, dwells (4177) wrote:

Pardon my coarse introduction, I'm such a kibbitzer! You are the boss and we do have several poets who regularly dabble in olde English. Welcome again and you are most gracious, thanks!
A former member wrote: Love it and the rhyme scheme really adds effect. Personally, I like that you used thee and thy, as it really sets the mood. It almost reminds me of the way an ancient curse would be written, which is cool.
On Tuesday, January 15, 2013, dwells (4177) wrote:

Not sure the thee and thy was necessary but the ending was a great metaphor and welcome to DP!